Poem -
Eyes
Life is not about
Putting on a smile,
Not about making nice.
Girl who pretends soldier's
Got something to pay
The price.
Light was about parks,
Swings and slides.
Dark brings vulnerability
Of being alive.
Car in the drive
Backs out looking for
Nice girl whose survived,
Girl who use to have
The too-kind eyes.
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Sounds to me that there is a huge amount of compassion from a soldier, I see a young girl under rubble, and a Soldier desperate to save her. 🌹
Good to hear from you my friend.
Always good to be here my dear friend of poetry, I'm just incredibly busy with work and all...🌹
Life 😶
Like the way second verse bleeds into the third and altogether this is lovely R... kind of a haunting quality x
Weird. I like the first verse lol
Yea...like that too..liked it all R... like the way you put words together to create an atmosphere and feeling rather than an easy to follow story. Have always admired that quality in your work ...oh...and don't shout at me for praising your work 😆
I'm so glad you would never say 'koy', rather, subtlety is my aim. And I'll thank you, amongst the others, who should rightfully know who they are, that have noticed. I gamble on the chance it might be so overhead but like to think it worth it.
My first thoughts on reading this were, "Oh, I hope the car didn't hit the girl!" but on reading again it seems much more of a metaphorical write, more about how life chews us up and spits us back out. I enjoyed reading x