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Cyborg Horse

Cyborg Horse

A clunking, clanking, robotic motioned force
Gears turn in clockwise creaks for the cyborg horse
Is he machine or custom creature of art?
Within his iron ribs beats a living heart

Stoic stare, with lights comprised inside his chest
His intimidation flows to show protest 
The age of control comes through technology
An armored-cut horse is not the best to see

He rocks in programmed rhythm, lacking delight
His function is dysfunctional, without life
Somewhere, the horse is buried beneath steel
Unsure of who he is, or what he should feel 

Long ago, he galloped for his own leisure
With spiritual wind of God’s great pleasure
Endowed with power and invisible wings
To fly free without stiffened robotic things

Humanity fashions restraints of every kind
To manipulate and control a strong-willed mind
Poor cyborg horse, made of debilitating parts
His freedom thwarted by Armageddon darts
 
 

 

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Angel

Great write very imaginitive angel

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Linda...Thank you!  I love horses, as most on here probably know who read my poetry....but I do not think I would like a horse to be made into a robot and not allowed to be free.  My children got these cyborg dragons and wolves model figures for Christmas, and I think it made me think of what a cyborg horse would be like with all the gears and parts,  I am happy you found it imaginative...Thank you. xo Love n Hugs  

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Tony Taylor

WOW!! LOVE!!.... this is great!!...... you've made a case for it!!.... A poetically legal stance!!...... An imprisoned soul...... your imagination, your unique blend of creativity and empathy has made incarnate this truly compelling being as both a character and a 'real possibility'!!.... although there is one thing that I don't quite agree with ~ you left as a question whether he was machine or custom creature of art?!......I believe he would be both and MORE..... but hey, that's just me arguing the case for the defense (SMILES)..... there are SO many excellently unique phrases within this piece that make it amazing and worthy of a PIN!! ~

                        ~ "His function is dysfunctional, without life..."
                        ~ "His freedom thwarted by Armageddon darts..."

I don't think you'll find those lines ANYWHERE else....EVER!!......ALL STARS & PINNED!!...... great work dear poet sister!!......KISSES!!.......T xo. : )

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Cherie Leigh

Thank you, T!  You know me, ever sensitive to animals and especially horses, being they are my favorite creature.  I cannot imagine stiffening their freedom and grace by turning them into some hybrid robotic creature that has no will.  (I admit they would look pretty cool and creepy at the same time.)  I had fun creating a futuristic kind of portrayal of where all our technological advances are taking us...where we may become like gods, messing with nature and manipulating our world for selfish motivations and power.  I like the lines you quoted as your favorites...because I was trying so hard to make this one have some original lines to stand out and get my point across...Thanks, Tony.  I am honored that you pinned it.  Yay!  Love n Hugs, C xo ;)  

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Greg....Thank you so much!  I wanted to try a different theme, and had cyborgs on my mind from some Christmas gifts my kids received of cyborg dragons and wolves...and it was natural to make my poem about a cyborg horse because I love horses so much.  I appreciate your kind support. xo ;)

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Greg Etsell

My Christmas was a Starbucks gift cards

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Cherie Leigh

Lol....Well, that seem befitting to me for you since you love to hang out there all the time..Lots of good flavors to enjoy!  Merry Christmas!  xo ;)

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Curious Onlooker

"His freedom thwarted by Armageddon darts" wow Cherie that end kind of hits you with a pow. Great work here and I feel as though you stepped outside of the norm to write something different so kudos on that was well! Humanity definitely has a way of taking something beautiful and twisting it for profit and gain. Love it, well done. 

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Curious!  Your words mean so much!  Thank you.  You got my intent perfectly to show how humanity can warp and taint something beautiful for selfish gains and plots.  This was my attempt to show that I can be a versatile writer....As most know me as a romantic writer, but I love a challenge and to show different aspects to my writing as well.  Bless you.  You made my night to read your encouraging supportive comments.  Love n Hugs, xo ;)

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Leah Cabael Yodico

 Stellar write Cherie... I agree with you;  a horse should be relaxed, free, and unconstrained... technology is evolving beyond our control.
Thanks for sharing 
hugs 
Leah

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Leah....You are in align with my thoughts!  Some things are tainted and ruined when mankind gets a notion of how to change and derange something that was perfect from  God's original creation and intention for something.  Thank you for your kind support.  xo Love n Hugs  ;)

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Jill Tait

Awww brilliant!! 💕💕💕

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Cherie Leigh

Hello Jill!  Thank you!  I got my inspiration from some dragon and wolf cyborg toys my children got for Christmas that were rather bizarre looking but also futuristic in impression....as if all things in the future go to technology...even compromising the biology that is already perfect by God, that gets tainted by humanity's visions and selfish motivations for control.
Love n Hugs, xo ;)

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Jill Tait

Aww sheer Cherie Brilliance as ever luv ❤️

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Cherie Leigh

Awww shucks!  Thank you!  You are the best!  xo ;)

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Katina Woodruff...

 
When I first read it, I imagined a programmer fighting with code, not being able to exercise the poetic devices, through the constrains of too much work. I saw the horse as a person, robotic in nature, when in reality a horse wants to have the freedom to live, and the freedom to create. 

Tony Taylor's, review of your poem was excellent. I like how he digs deep into a poem and pulls out the hidden meanings.

Favorite Stanza: 

He rocks in programmed rhythm, lacking delight
His function is dysfunctional, without life
Somewhere, the horse is buried beneath steel
Unsure of who he is, or what he should feel 

Good work with the rhyme. 
Thanks for sharing your poem. 
 
 

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Cherie Leigh

HI Katina...Thank you very much!  Your thorough review and thoughts mean so much.  I like your deeper meaning you saw as you read it..That is cool!  I love horses, and the thought of tainting them into a machine that takes their will and spirit away  is a devastating thought to me.  What God creates is perfect, and we should respect nature.  To corrupt something into a machine based response, and breaking its will is an abomination to me.  As cool as the movies make cyborgs in theme, to imagine them in the real world is frightening....as we will be next to be corrupted too.  I am happy you liked the rhyme.  The flow of my poetry is in the foreground of my mind as I write it, so that is nice that you notice. 

xo ;) 

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A Lonely Journey

Cheerie, 
What a beautiful, sad, engaging write. (You're so good!). 
And to me(maybe I read into things too much, and know how smart and inventive you are), it went beyond the horse, and into this crazy, electronic world of ours. It brought to mind for me, this age of electronics, and everyone with their nose stuck in their phones, and texting, and not seeing the beauty and love all around them(part of the reason I don't have a cell phone(that and my yak peed on it). LOL. 
Anyway, you're such a creative, wonderful mind, and great writer, that I always see other things in your writing, and that's what makes it even more beautiful. Like a Frost poem, or something. 
Truly awesome, Cheerie. (like Truly Scrumptous. What was that? Chitty Chitty Bang Bang?). 
Please write a poem very 11 seconds like Jill, so I can live in your beautiful world. 

Thanks! 
Love and hugs, 

Matthew. 

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Cherie Leigh

Oh wow!  Thanks, Matthew!  ;)  I admit that I am a bit uncomfortable with how everything has gone to computers and machines and technological advancing that seems to be taking over.  The human touch is lost with all the "improvements" that take away from emotional connections.  I am sorry your yak peed on your cell phone, but I guess he was sending a message about how he feels about technology when he is there for companionship and to feel love...lol  I do not have landline phone...just my cell, but I only use it to take calls and text occasionally....not obsessed with it as a computer online.  I am saddened by seeing people walking by looking down at their phones, and not seeing their smile or eyes anymore.  I get what you are saying.  We miss so much emotional connection by plugging into machines that think for us.  I would never want to see a cyborg horse...losing his will and spirit for a purpose that is not his own...but humanity's warped selfish motivations...perhaps for war or destructive purposes...sigh.  Thanks for understanding my heart, Matthew. 

Love n Hugs. Cheerie ;) xo 

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A Lonely Journey

You're so welcome, Cheerie. 
Thanks for writing so wonderfully, and for having a beautiful heart that is so worth understanding. 
L&H, 
M. 

PS. Thanks for understanding about the yak urine, it can wreak havoc upon electronics, and linens. I find it a nuisance. Thanks! M. 

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Cherie Leigh

Lol....You have such patience, Matthew...You must truly love your yaks...or not care about electronics...lol

Thank you for making me feel special.  You are always so supportive. xo ;)

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A Lonely Journey

Well, 
I like you even more than yaks, if that means anything. Sure, their hair is fantastic, but most of their comments on my poems involve yellow stains on my papers, and loud, ungodly noises. Your comments are nice. 
I wish you all the yaks your little heart desires, always. 

Glove and slugs, 
Matthew. 

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Cherie Leigh

Well, it is nice to know I am appreciated more than yaks, as I know how much they mean to you....lol  They do have great mop top hair cuts...  ;)

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A Lonely Journey

I know! 
They go to Cost Cutters for their haircuts. Did you know that? 
(I read that in my Yak Weekly magazine). 
Sigh, 
Matthew. 

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Cherie Leigh

No, I did NOT know that!  I just knew that I never saw them at Fantastic Sams or Great Clips, and assumed they had a specialty barber shop.  Good to know!  ;) 

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A Lonely Journey

Hey Cheerie, have a nice weekend! If you see Marionette around Cosmo(she's probably in the break room heating up her fish pancakes), tell her she has to write a poem for her mime contest. 
Also, you get on your little writing shoes and whip one out, OK? 
I imagine it will be mimes falling in love, and miming their vows to each other, and ridiculously beautiful, and will win the contest outright, but get going! LOL. 
Thanks, truly, 

M. 

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Cherie Leigh

You have a nice weekend, too, Matthew.  Please do not put pressure on me to write a mimery poem, it would seem so phony from me as a romantic writer...but I will read yours.  Thank you for wanting to include me.  xo ;)

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A Lonely Journey

Oh Kiddo, you could do it, you're brilliant! Just ask me. 
What about a mime who has an inner ear infection, and people have trouble understanding his getting out of a box routine, because he keeps falling over? Just an idea. 
Go for it! 
L&H, 
Matthew. 

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Cherie Leigh

Lol...See!  This is just YOUR perfect theme to write about..I would have never thought of that! Sigh...Humor suits you....for sure M.  

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GREG TUCKER

I love this. I feel like I am in revelations 

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Greg....I love that you had that feeling like from Revelation....and that is exactly the kind of scenario I think of...an apocalyptic moment in history when God's creation has totally been manipulated and warped into some monstrosity.  Thanks for your support and insight.  ox ;)  Love n Hugs  

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Larry Ran

My Dear Cherie,

What once was free and spirited, roamed the World with no restraints
Now has become the "Cyborg Horse", his progeny, mankind taints
For in the olden days, he galloped, o'er the face of Mother Earth
But no longer is he living, suffering from modern monstrous dearth

All my love,
Larry xxx
 

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Cherie Leigh

Hi dear Larry....Perfect summation!  Poor perfect horse creation becomes something of an abomination because of man.  Your verses cut to the heart of what this write is about....Thank you!  xo ;)  Love n Hugs  

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