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Lovers Lament

Lovers Lament

No worse a curse known throughout all history 
Than the tale of two lovers sealed up in a tree
Their naked bodies embedded with bark and leaves
Back to back, as crucified, condemned thieves

Twisted and contorted, posed just out of each other's reach  
Unable to turn around, trapped in despairing beseech
With desperate desires to see the other's eyes  
The tree rocks them in the wind with insatiable lies

Taunting and teasing, their fate's impossible union
With limited hand touch, they barely feel human
Yet, somehow inside, their heartbeats remember
When desirous bodies once embraced, soft and limber

What crime could they have committed to cause such curse?
Perhaps, becoming romanticized in poetic verse
Where the classic Shakespearean tales were over spent
Leaving a logical demise where lovers lament
 

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Sparrowsong

Hello Sis Cherie...

The pain of the bark makes it difficult to concentrate...

Sensitive areas...

OUCH!

Great write!

Thank you for sharing...

Love n Hugs

sparrowsong

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Cherie Sumner

Lol...Probably a logical explanation...you are funny. Somehow, you  made my tragedy a comedy....I sure hope there is not any poison oak or ivy around that tree as well... Not a good situation at all no matter what!  I love doing narratives that can leave some elements up to the reader's imagination for the details....Thanks for your valued input, sis Sparrowsong.... xo Love n Hugs, Cherie

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LiamoAlive

incoherent uninspiring no need for shakesqueer but slightly as interesting as the picture

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Sparrowsong

Hello Sis Cherie...

They didn't appear to be scratching so I wasn't seeing that problem...

It goes to show why clothing can be very important...

😯

Love n Hugs

sparrowsong

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Lorna Caizley

Cherie, I absolutely love the tale, so tragic, yet love still survives in them. I really love your way with words, Just so you know...The inarticulate buffoon above, is exactly what he stated..Incoherent and uninspiring......Loved your poem
All my love Lorna xxx

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Cherie Sumner

HI Lorna....Thank you...You got it perfectly!  I always like to leave a sliver of hope....even in such dismal situations...lol   I was just trying to do something different...It is fun. I appreciate your support. Love n Hugs, xox Cherie

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Jason Brown

What crime could they have committed to cause such curse?
Perhaps, becoming romanticized in poetic verse

The story you tell here is more reminiscent of Dante than Shakespeare. It calls to mind the thirteenth Canto of Inferno: the Circle of the Suicides, where the damned slowly turn into the trees from which they hanged themselves...Io fei gibetto a me del le mei case.

The central image; of two lovers eternally kept apart, but tantalisingly within reach: is a powerful and tragic one. And you paint the fuller picture with your characteristic poetic aplomb: "Yet, somehow inside, their heartbeats remember/When desirous bodies once embraced, soft and limber"

Melancholy and touching.

J xx

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Cherie Sumner

Hey Jason. I realize this write is very melancholy and dismal...unlike my typical writes....and i worried how it may come across to some readers...I really like to change things up and try new toned themes.  You sum up well the story-line and the yearning that remains....I have come to know very well that you will really be discerning....I vaguely remember the Circle of the Suicides...very morose.  I would love to be compared to Dante...to understand that you, as the reader, gets the severity of the situation in that same kind of hopeless tone.....It was hard for me to leave the lovers in this perpetual state....as my instinct is to end a poem with some kind of resolution...Narratives are fun to play with.  Thank you for your kind review. xox Cherie

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Tony Taylor

Hey C!!.....this is somewhat of a departure for you......had to be hard given that you're such a positive and empathetic soul..... but stretching your wings into the relatively morose and melancholy just solidifies (to my mind) that you're a damn good writer and can do anything you put your mind to!!...FISTFUL-O-STARS!!.....'Yet somehow their heartbeats remember..'..... great stuff..... kisses......T xoxxxx 😉✳✴☀♥♥👍👍

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Cherie Sumner

Hi Sweet T...I am thankful that you understand that I just wanted to try a different feel for my poetry...as I usually am so sentimental about portraying hope in a poem....but this was a fun stretch to create a narrative of more melancholy feel.  You quoted the only part of my poem that even has a hint of hope...that hearts remember love and hold on to what they know....Thank you!  Kisses xxxxx C

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Luke Coomer

Now that's what I'm talking about, go ahead and drop the mic on this one!!! Easlily one of the best poems I've ever read period, I'm honored to bare witness to this masterpiece.....
i bow before your greatness master poet

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Cherie Sumner

Hi Luke Coomer....Oh Wow!  Thank you!  Thank you!  I was nervous with this one and did not know what people would think of it....It is a sad toned one and I know readers are used to me offering hope...I like to do narratives because of the freedom to be creative....I am so excited to have such overwhelming support..Bless you!  xo  Cherie  ;)

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Larry Ran

My Dear Poetess Cherie,

Your mind is amazingly eclectic!  These brilliant forays you create lay such solid foundations for me to embellish on. 

Imprisoned on "The Tree Of Life"
A curse on them bestown
They ask who the evil perpetrator be
But the answer is unknown

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Back to back, unable turn
So close but yet so far
Desires quelled by rocking winds
They sob beneath the stars

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They're the victims of author's overuse
Redundantly romanticized 
A millennium of sad cliches
Brought their inevitable demise

All my love,
Larry xxx

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Cherie Sumner

Ah ha! Lol!  You wrote the perfect summation of my narrative!  PERFECT explanation of their demise...I feel so blessed, Larry, that you truly reflect attentively to what you read and understand the heart of my writes..Bless you! I love your response..Thank you...I hope other readers read your response...so well thought....It is the greatest compliment to feel so appreciated... Love n Hugs, xox Cherie

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Larry Ran

It is also "the greatest compliment" to receive such beautiful words of appreciation.

Hugs, Peace and Love,
Larry xxx

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Cherie Sumner

It is always an honor...I look forward to your commentary because it shows how much you appreciate poetry and what you read is stirred in your mind and heart....I always know you take me seriously and do not skim through what you read.. Thank you!  Thank you, my friend...It is gold to receive your responses..xo   

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