‘Always look on the bright side of life’
Destiny is time just like fate is chance, tho destiny doesn’t know immediately because it lies in the advance.. whilst one can only hope that their destiny is kind, shall there be a light at the end of the tunnel, a pot of gold to find ? well these answers are impossible, our future is afar..written a million miles away on a distant star
Yet we live in expectations of fortune and faith, whilst one can only hope, there is this presence of the wraith.. an unsightly unexpectancy beyond one’s control, that is capable of coming out of it’s blighted, black hole.. so alas no matter how we endeavor, nor what methods one may try, questions of what, where,
how on earth ? will leave us wondering why but never, ever give up hope, keep optimism in your heart.. praying and belief is a positive start..always look on the bright side of life, that advice could steer you from troubles and strife
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great poem I loved it!!!!!!
I hope you will read my
new poem
Aww i will luv ty xxx
Such a warm and beautiful poem. I'm so happy I read it.
Favorite part:
"a pot of gold to find ? well these answers are impossible, our future is afar..written a million miles away on a distant star"
I read it twice and came to the same conclusion both times that, to make the poem even better you could:
1. Tighten up the punctuation. Adding a period at the end of the last sentence. Some places where you have the question marks, it may read better with less of them. Just one idea to play around with.
2. To insert a new stanza in the middle of the two. Or add to the existing stanzas for an over-all, detailed look at future endeavors or possibilities.
Thanks for sharing your poem.
Thanks my luv, I’ve deleted few q’ mark & less commas xxxx