Ben
My name is Ben
I am ten
I'm down by the glen
It's quite lonely here
Just me, Dad and the deer
We've ran away, you see
I don't know who's looking for me
My mam and maybe Lucy who's three
My mam wanted us to go
Away from Dad, and all I know
To make a fresh start
In some foreign part
I told Dad, he called mum a tart
and said over his dead body
Was she taking me
I went for my usual stay
Every Sunday was Dad's day
He asked me did I want a few days of school
We'd take a trip, I said "cool"
It feels like forever we've been here
Me, dad and the deer
I miss my mam, wish she were here
I even miss Lucy, who I thought I didn't like
But I wish i could hold the little tyke
My name is Ben
I am ten
I'm down by the glen
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Comments
sad and brilliant poem susan something that happens to a lot of children great write tina x
thanks Tina x
Okay hairs stood on the back of my neck Susan, haunting is the word id use for this. You SO get the view of a 10 year old boy here.. like WOW.. This is just so good. Congrats on the Nom.. so deserved. This is good stuff Susan. Well done. ... faved.
Louise high praise from a great poet like yourself thanks so much x
Brilliant. Definitely a good interpretation of a common (and unfortunate) ocurence in our society.
thanks so much Jason x
thanks Debra x
I honestly wasn't sure about this at first but once in for a few seconds you had me entrapped by your words and imagery. GREAT JOB!!!
thanks Darla x
Susan,
What can i say...I started reading this, not realizing what i was about to embark on and by the time i had reached the end, i found myself reading it again and again.This is a brilliant poem an additive of all emotions have you stored in the entire poem, all lines had their separate means but came together as a whole to present itself as a wonderful, sad,happy and special poem,with the feelings of being cast right into the poem...This is a lovely poem /short wonderful story...As always , you cease to let us down..
Kindest,
Jim
Hi Jim how nice to hear from you thanks for a wonderful comment glad you enjoyed the poem all the best
Susan x