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~ CONCRETE GRAVEYARD ~

~ CONCRETE GRAVEYARD ~

It is written already, deep within the depths
Of monuments and concrete blocks
Upon which All things are eventually chiseled,
Etched, woven, or laid to rest
This graveyard where, not all is a test..

When the night falls down into intimacies call
Like the window that waits for its drapery
A kind of ballet dancing between glassy fabrics
Begins to take the days sunshine away
A tomb of gathered and graying clouds..

It is here, where, my thoughts conglomerate
Weave in and out of the courtyard of Anubis
Unfixed reality where the bones of fate
Are jumbled, broken, there to confuse us
A concrete graveyard of ideas in shrouds..

Should I never slumber, in thought everlastingly
I should feel that chill of haunted pilgrims
Whose shores strewn with grotesque histories
Would forge my madness, complete my synchronicity
And leave me in a concrete graveyard
Alone,
Where Venus comes
To dance me home...

Tony Taylor
* a work in progress

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Being Me

And leave me in a concrete graveyard
Alone,
Where Venus comes
To dance me home...

I love the ending of this poem! It finishes the poem perfectly...well, I think it does. It is a contrast to the starkness of "concrete graveyard" and also providesΒ  a contrast to the finality, or what we think of as finality, of death andΒ the hope of a peaceful heaven. Great work as always, Tony x

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Tony Taylor

Yeah!!….I'm so glad you noticed that BEING ME!!……..I wrestled with the idea for a moment....but then, the truth won out.....and that truth, for me, is that life continues on after that final moment.....and wouldn't it be cool if Love came to dance you home!!?? (smiles)…….hey, positivity works for me (more smiles)…….thanx SO much for this dear poet sister!!…….stay groovy!!…...T xoΒ  : )

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Tony Taylor

Yay!!...One of your Fav's!!…..that's such a major 'pat on the back'.....thank you SO much DARKLY!!…….coming from you it means a lot me as respect your magic pen greatly!!…….Lots of Love to you and yours girlfriend!!…...smiles...….T xoΒ  : )

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Tony. Awesome original phrases and creative imagery.Β  I like how you use Anubis metaphorically for taking those to death that we all have to face with that odd concrete set up as our resting place..and then Venus metaphorically as hope that there is a loving presence after death that awaits us....giving hope to a rather dismal idea of the grave.Β  I like this...Is this new?Β  I don't remember it if it is an older rewrite.Β  I like the picture you chose too...I studied it first before I even read....Great work, T.Β  Love n Hugs, C xo ;)Β 

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Tony Taylor

Thanx C!!...your comments are so accurately inspiring.....your ability to highlight those intended talking points is uncanny....or maybe it's just that you know my stuff so well!!??.....regardless, it's VERY much appreciated......and ALWAYS happily anticipated......thanx again love!!.....hugs n smiles!!......T xoΒ  : )

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Tony Taylor

Thanx GREG!!…...much appreciated brother!!…….smiles.....T xoΒ  : )

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Michael Roy

This is deep, in more ways than one, Tony. Going to such depths, ending up with loneliness and accepting. And waiting for Venus, or a love, to come and take you away from all that. That's what it says to me. That's something I relate to all too well, especially the third verse.Β 
It is here, where, my thoughts conglomerate
Weave in and out of the courtyard of Anubis
Unfixed reality where the bones of fate
Are jumbled, broken, there to confuse us
A concrete graveyard of ideas in shrouds..

When I'm lost, down in the dumps, sick, lonely and full of remorse, all kinds of thoughts go through my head, memories come like freight trains. Depression sets in and I wanna write but can't. But, the dark clouds are lifted eventually and soon enough, I pick up a pen or my device and start creating, rather than go out and drink. Being a recovering alcoholic, it's so meaningful and valuable to me to hold onto that creativity. It's truly a blessing. I thank Creator for it and I'm so undeserving. So, thanks for sharing this, brother poet. It reminded me of where I was and motivates me to stay above it. 5 stars, like and pin. ✊

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Tony Taylor

Wow MIKE!!….what an amazing comment......I thank you for sharing all that you did here......I don't know if you know this.....but I too struggled with the alcohol thing throughout my lifetime.....and although I DID create some great work while drinking red wine and can't advocate it I will say that there is something about altering one's state of consciousness that can be quite beneficial to an artist......thank you for pointing out the third verse because Anubis is important to me.....your interpretation of this piece is 'spot on' as well'!!…...I REALLY appreciate all of your support my friend!!…..Kings to you dear poet brother!!…..Lots of Love to you and yours!!…..and please.....stay safe Mike!!…….peace bro!!…...T xoΒ  : )

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Barry Childs

Hi Tony, I haven't been around lately, so I will have to catch up with all the poetry. I really like the idea of death being a sort of interlude with love breaking the concrete barrier, Great work, mate. Stay safe.Β  Barry x

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Tony Taylor

Thank you BARRY!!...so nice to see you back on the pages again brother......Looking forward to reading new things from that mighty pen pf yours!!…….I hope that you're keeping safe my friend.....please pass on my hugs and hellos to the wife.,.....talk soon I hope Barry!!…...LOVE & ROCKETS!!…...T xoΒ  : )

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