Poem -

Criticize

Criticize

Ā Go ahead.
Criticize!

I enjoy the rise.
Nothing blooms a roseĀ 
like a mentalĀ 
compromise.

I eat thatĀ 
without even
Ā searing the sides.
Raw meet ,
Ā 
blood on my paper. Ā 
Grizzle on my pencil
Il draw you withoutĀ 
using a stencil.

Bring some saltĀ 
Because I’mĀ 
fresher thanĀ 
lentil.

Thought I hit the blockĀ 
Then the tikĀ 
started to TokĀ 
and I Beat the shitĀ 
right out of the clock.

BaneĀ  is the fame.
And insane is the game
And I’ve been at thisĀ 
Since I’m 17.

Not a big fan of rap
But when the words are phat
I seem to have a nackĀ 
In fact.

Like Tesla
369 .
Havent got a dime
Wright it down 3 times.

Cant Tip the bar
But I can play the guitar
Like Clapton.
Right the notes on a napkin.

Born as a lionĀ 
the sun is my pride
And that’s noĀ 
exaggeration.

If criticism is what you give
I’m on top of this hill.

Saturday’s could kill!

If Friday don’t
..so take your time.

Rock is around
and it’s still a Rollin
Its only here to makeĀ  you proud.
Ā 

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Terry Kay

Edward, what a gifted mind you have.Ā  love your poem.Ā  Terry KayĀ 

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Edward Williams

God love you terry thanks. yours as well
I have been reading.thanksĀ 
much abliged

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Edward Williams

I hate rap but sometimes if I’m not working on any thing il
free verse lol
thanks guys I’m extteramly thank full for your kind words ?

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Simon Bromley

Very creative and well written.Ā  We use whatever tools we can in order to get a poem flowing, after all its all expression of our soul.

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Edward Williams

You couldent have said it better perfect example of that here lol
thsnk you Simon I admire your work as well

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