Poem - 31 May 2018, 15:06

Dark Blue

At a steep angle
The bottle does glug
The glass fills fast
With awe I gasp

Stops my worries in their tracks
A salt line to a slug...

A taste of freedom
Down my throat
Worries jettisoned
My sacred medicine

Temporary isolation
Just a tidal moat...

Why are we here?
I don't remember
The summer gives way
To the misty mornings of September

Early dementia
Who are you?
At depth I yearn
For bioluminescent blue

You feel the dark cold??
I feel it too

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Tony Taylor31 May 2018, 20:17

This is an Extraordinary write!!..... Dear SYD!!.....what you have sculpted here is just short of poetic perfection!!..... the only reason I say 'Short' is because it has yet to be reviewed by the "poetry foundation"..... where I am quite sure they would agree...... you, my friend........ARE......one helluva poet/writer!!......and this...... is the beginning of your career as a poet!!.......I am not saying this out of arrogance.......I am saying it because your words speak for themselves and I am proud to say I have been a witness to your progress as a writer........ one day we will discuss this write........WOW!!......friggin' amazing!!...,,,,, many thanx to you Sir!!.......PINNED for perfection!!........T xo ??✴❤❤✴?

Syd01 June 2018, 02:14

Thank you Tony for your kind and encouraging feedback.

I pretty much just write whatever is on my mind at the time, I do continually try to improve my writing, but at the same time I always try to stay true to myself.

I'm glad you like this one so much and think so highly of it.

(my apologies for my reply, as you know I'm not too good at leaving comments/feedback)

Take care - Syd xo

lodigiana01 June 2018, 06:45

There is a sense of confusion and angst in this splendid piece of work Syd, that I can totally relate to! Life sometimes is a struggle and we all look to differing ways to numb that feeling..I dont know if this is personally related or you have created this but whatever source it came from it is exceptional in its quality, rhythm and use of imagery- Like this very much my friend- well done!

Lodigiana x

Syd01 June 2018, 07:53

Hi Lodigiana, thank you for stopping by my page and leaving feed back. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, rhythm and imagery. I usually write from personal experience but sometimes I mix it up a little.

Thanks again.

Take care - Syd x