Poem -
Dark Circles
A barbarous evening last night
No pilot at the controls
Artificially induced InsomniaΒ
Dark eye sockets like dogs arseholes
Gums numb like dead nipplesΒ
A furry caterpillar tongue
Crimson blood in saliva
Heavy lead lines laboured lungs
Wishing moments away
Craving the next vibrant dawn
An unholy creature incarnateΒ
A profligate being rebornΒ
Comments
Holy Cow!! SYD!!!.....sounds like one helluva time was had last night.....followed by the hangover from hell!!.....I have to say though....THIS is an exceptionally well written/crafted piece.....with extraordinary phrasing that brings to life the hangover/regretful aspect of "It was a blastΒ while it lasted ~ but payed for it the next day!" ~!
Some of my Fav's: ~
Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β ~ "Gums numb like dead nipples.."
Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β ~ "Dark eye sockets like dogs arseholes.."
Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β ~ "A profligate being reborn..."
I SO LOVE the word 'Profligate'.....most people have never even heard that word.....but once you know it you will NEVER forget it!! (smiles).....I hope you didn't spent too much money brother..or....waste too much of something good.....regardless, a MOST excellent poem has been born because of it!!....Had no choice ~ PINNED for absolute Perfection!!.....LOVE it!!.....Stay groovy brother!!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xoΒ : )
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Hi Tony, thanks so much for your positive comment and also for the pin.
I'm much better now, very little money was spent on the night in question actually. I wanted a word to describe wastefullness in better detail....I came accross the word 'Profligate' and I'm so glad I did.
Hope you're keeping well. Stay safe.
Love and rocketsΒ - Syd xoΒ
wow Syd what a crafty write!
Thank you Lisa,
I know it's a dark write but that's just me.
Stay safe during these uncertain times.Β
- Syd xoΒ