" DEAD MAN'S LAST THOUGHTS "

In the flat icy cold, he floated
Carefully breathing his last breaths
His thoughts taking him away
From the pins and needles, the cold sting
Of his fast approaching death
"It's funny." he thought, how the pain of the wet cold
Could bring a warm comfort as he floated away
Into the memories of youth, the back seat sex
The sermons at church, the hunger in his first taste of Love
The pewter spoon at breakfast, the prayers in the dark
The ceaseless moil, the inner turmoil
And all of the things that he would desperately miss
All because his lies had rightfully capsized
Leading him here, into this flat, icy cold
Where he floated above himself
Choosing each memory, pacing each breath
For the inevitable had arrived
And he found himself unprepared
For this cold, icy, death
He recalled a promise he'd made
To himself as a child
That he would not die alone
Never, die alone
Yet here he was
With a bullet in his chest
Floating alone, into a watery grave
Where he no longer felt pain
Only regrets
For he'd been a dishonest man
And to himself, he recognized the irony
All of the money and all of the power
Could no longer help
As he drew his last breath
And sank into the blackness
Of a cold, icy chamber
Filled with the stench
Of all of his,
Ice cold,
Regrets...
Tony Taylor. (Chicago)
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Yay!! ~ Thanx CHERIE!!...... you have a way of seeing the truth in an authors write that is uncanny!!........ you saw the exact intent of this write....... and conveyed it perfectly in your comment........thanx for being cool C!!.........appreciate this very much........ your admirer!!......T xo
Hi  Tony Great write of the last thoughtsÂ
of the man taking his last breath the nice memories he had
and also the regrets The story has great imaginary.
You are always so good with that
how you told of the coldness and when he died gave me shiversÂ
really enjoyed love n hugs Debs xo
Thanx DEBS!!.......I was going for the shivers..... hope I didn't make you shiver too much (lol!)..... this was one of those writes that just sorta shows itself to your mind once you start writing.......thanx for taking some time with this........ appreciate it my friend....... hugs-n-smiles........T xo
Hmmm... "back seat sex"!!! Two minds think alike! LOL GREAT WRITE my good buddy! Happy I dropped by... man hugs, Jack xo
Such a deeply moving and intense topic given an incredibly powerful and sympathetic treatment by your creative and understanding mind.
Great write.
All the best to you ! Â :)
"Chilling!"
Seriously. Sounds like the begging of a great detective novel. Can't wait to read the rest.
KIMMY!! ~ seriously,... you are so friggin' cool!!......I had a detective story in mind when creating this.......Thanx so much for this!!....... you B Da Bomb!! (lol)........ Love and Rockets!!.....T xo
Very cool write T. I really enjoyed the way you steered the reader away from the imminent death with lively thoughts of positivity then brought us back to death giving a bit of inscription as to what kind of man he is. Do I sense a bit of yourself in him with regrets and not being able to better oneself? You truly have a gift for the story telling my brother.....awesome. Peace.