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Demolition

Demolition

It's a common saying: dead inside
To function without passion
To awaken without zest
A dull disinterest in life
No invested sense of expectation
No curiosity or excitement
Just dry detatched faux participation
Pretending to be present yet galaxies away
And I can't put my finger on it
The trigger for this pulseless blood
That vanishes my veins and sense of self
Everything's undergoing erasure
Like a castle of sand at the beach
That has no way
Of resisting the buffeting of time

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Gwendoline

Just dry detatched faux participation
Pretending to be present yet galaxies away

WOW this is something special. You have captivated that sense of numbness that can occur to a spirit suffering trauma. But you penned it in such a delicate way, that it lulls the reader gently into a sense of detachment. Again your analogies are just so beautifully done. A truly wonderful write 

Gwen :) 

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al Bikaadi

Very deep analysis.... I like how you described the poems effect 🙏🏼

Thank you 

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Being Me

Pretending to be present yet galaxies away

I can relate to that!  My god, I can! 

Excellent poem, Al 👏👏👏👏 x

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al Bikaadi

Thanks. I think everyone has to have felt this way at least once in their life. It's a horrid emotion/mood but part of the human condition. 

SHALOM 🤎

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Jim "The Lad" ....

" ever learning and never coming to the knowledge of"  this is my take on a cool write!......................................Jim

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