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DEMON BIRTH

DEMON BIRTH

In the blank aggression
That is lost lust
Tiny portions of shelled bones
Fragmented upon the beach
Of all that was once well
Takes a slow dissolve,
Why tear my soul apart
Unless you're devouring my heart
Why partake of bloody sustenance
As you're idling deep
Within the pool of my fears
And I hate you for it,
My skin tastes its very first cold
Morning's heartbeat has a new approach
And I find myself alone
On cemetery's bench
Where death began
Where I fought the demon
Deep inside of me
And now
With the battle lost
I rise to my feet
And step toward the destiny
Of my life
As a vampire,
I tremble
Stop dead in my tracks
Shed my final tear
Then
With a terrible lust
I leap at the thought
Of my very first victim
And the bloody trail
That will soon become
My life's work
I smile,
As I wince
At the approaching
Daylight....

Tony Taylor

 

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Syd

Hi Tony, this is very different from you. Very much enjoyed. Very dark and very Dean. You two should maybe do a co -write.

- Syd 

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Tony Taylor

Thank you SO much SYD!!.....I talked to DEAN..... and we ARE going to do a co-write.......thanx to you brother!!.... hugs n smiles......T xo ❤

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Syd

You're very welcome Tony. That's great, I look forward to reading it.

- Syd xo 

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Charu Shawd

Tony
you manage to put forth an array of emotions in such an abstract way , its becoming increasingly challenging for amateurs like me to leave a good enough comment that this poem truly deserves.
Nonetheless, I will do my best..
stupendofantabulously fantastic this write is and it left me spoechless to see how commedably through your expression you have explored the dark side of human aspect.
Really really Exceptionally written !!!
Pinned 

much love 💕 
Charu
 

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Tony Taylor

Thank YOU dear CHARU!!.......you have gone 'over the top' with this amazingly kind comment....... and I am truly humbled....... of course you WILL do your best....EVERYTHING you done and said thus far on COSMO is a testament to that fact!!......I am your cyber-friend and admirer!!.....tony......thanx so much for the PIN girlfriend!!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.....T xo ❤

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Lauren Dorf

Hey Tony!

I loved this one, the tone of this piece was brilliant!
I'm a huge vampire fan, so this was right up my alley. 
Great image chosen as well!

Hugs xx
Lauren

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Tony Taylor

YAY!!..... I'm so happy to see you on my page LAUREN..... as ALWAYS It is a pleasure to hear from you.....I REALLY liked the image too...... you have good taste little darlin"!!........ hope it's not blood!!....... smiles......T xo 👌

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Dean Kuch

"In the blank aggression
That is lost lust
Tiny portions of shelled bones
Fragmented upon the beach"
... Good alliteration in line two, Tony. I also enjoyed the consonance of "b" and "s" sounds in this.

"Why tear my soul apart
Unless you're devouring my heart"
... Good use of incidental rhyming here...

"As a vampire,
I tremble
Stop dead in my tracks"
... "Stop dead in my tracks," says the Vampyre, lol. No pun intended, right, Tony?
Heh-heh-heh...

Excellent piece, Tony, and very dark as well.
You do darkness proud.
~Professor ⚰️ Poe~
🖤♥~❤️💀❤️~♥🖤

 

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Tony Taylor

Hey, Thanx PROFESSOR !!.....sorry for the late reply (STUFF😐).......so cool of you to point out the "Stop dead in my tracks " line..... It's my favorite...... 'subtly humorous' was my intent....... this comment is precisely why I asked you to have a look...... you're so damn good at it..... and it's VERY much appreciated my friend...... gonna send you a few opening lines (thoughts) for the co-write......should be fun........thanx again for this DEAN!!...... stay groovy bro!!....... peace n stuff.......T xo ✴👌✴😊

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Cherie Sumner

Hi Love...Sorry for the late response...You know what I have been working on...(wink wink)  This is one of your coolest vampire writes....I agree with the above comments on the imagery you created....But you also gave a story in short verse of one who is new at being a vampire....and with confusing feelings of hating her demonic creator who has now turned her into a monster as well....and helpless to the curse of feeding off flesh and blood too...her first victim at hand....  I got this feeling that she may step into the morning light and feel guilt and yet feel the escalation of what she has become to start a succession of victims..I really liked this....You are so original with your descriptions...It is so nice to always have someone that inspires me right here beside me....Makes me want to try new kinds of writes...Well done, T.  xo Kisses C 

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Tony Taylor

Thanx GORGEOUS!!..... yeah, you're right..... this does stand out amidst the other vampire stuff I've done.... so cool that you even remember the other ones...... you're awesome....... and aside from the obvious' Serious Sunburn'😊 you are correct about the struggle she would face when taking those first steps toward the daylight!!....... how I love your comments..... and you too!!...... hugs n kisses......T xo ❤❤❤❤✴👌

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Tina

Hi Tony. I can't believe I missed this one!  This is verrrry different from you. You do "darkness" proud my friend. That line about shelled bones that Dean pointed out really caught my eye. Love the way this reads. It's a proper story as well as a poem. Fantastic work 👏👏👏👏👏

I very much look forward to reading the co-write you mentioned you were going to do with Dean 😉

Tina x

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Tony Taylor

Hi TINA!!.....thanx so much girlfriend...... yeah, I has a lot of fun with this one.... and I too am looking forward to that co-write .....glad you liked it and found the story in it compelling!!...... you B 'da BOMB!!....,. smiles...... always a pleasure dear poet sister!!....... Kings to you.......T xo 👌✴👏👏✴❤ 

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GREG TUCKER

I love this brother.  WOW you are so talented.  Now about Vampires.  Incredible work!  Keep on inspiring me with your ink!
If you get a chance read my poem : Fool On the Hill and Black Bird singing.  I think you will get and enjoy both
Much Love bro
Greg

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