Despair
Devastated and ConfusedĀ
Sitting in a daze on top of my bed
Hearing agonising sounds of despair from downstairs!!
Dad came in and said `its time to go`..
What I was going to see I just didn't know...
I walked into the room
I saw the long think box
REALITY hit me
As a tree hit her!!
She was GONE
Taking so suddenly
So young and beautiful..
That didn't matter now!!
I rubbed my hand along her head, she was cold and pale she wasĀ
DEAD, DEAD, DEAD
I touched the clothes in which she wore, knowing I had wrapped them at Christmas, just a month before...
I walked towards the room
Where my eldest brother lay
Devastated and speechlessĀ
What were we supposed to say?
Maybe in the next life she will be my brothers wife
Xxx
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Very powerful and emotionally frank.
An excellent work.
Reminds me of Seamus Heaney's Mid-term Break, actually.
Keep on keeping on!
J x
Tanks Jason i find it easier to write when I'm emotionally connected with a situation. Really happy I found this website, I'm really enjoying it :) x
An excellent narrative piece..... compelling to the end......I could FEEL your passionate connection driving the phrasing to bring the story its realistic tone.......ALL STARS!!.... well done...... and .....,WELCOME to COSMO!!.......LOVE and ROCKETS!!.......T xo.Ā ?ā³ā“ā
Aw thank you Tony I am really enjoying being a part of Cosmo.. Its exciting to see that people have read my writing and even rated it.. Much appreciated thank you x
This is a sad sad story and theĀ pain is felt through your words.
Thank you for sharing.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.. It means a lot x
Sorry meant thank u Charlotte lol x