Poem -
Escape
Eyes masked by our miserable glory.
Blind from the good by evil.
In and out, fame arises. Keeping our past hidden in the dark.
Life as a prisoner, locked from cell to cell.
Alone, uncomforted. Crying for a guardian’s help.
Hands washed clean.
Dirty deeds done.
Leaving a shadow, musked in the dark.
The fame horizon broke. Torn away.Â
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Hey Katelyn,
Masterful play of post tense, displayed near the end, of all, of your sentences....all appears to be, of reluctant finalization's, of Preludes, to have come. A well written and calculatedly presented poem... A life lived but with many secrets to be found, a deprivation of self made ideas in life, sounds hinders the character in this one, such as Chris has related, (A prisoner in her own body)but willing to give her way of life and in her, on manner and self pride, another crack at life's, sometimes, allotted ,(to just a few), redemption... Strong poem of determination sought but opposition met, appeared, just as capable as the seeker....
Take Care,
Jim
Jim,Â
This was one of my very first poems so I was still getting the hang of my use of style and the mix of tenses was a mistake and it is a little different than what I've developed into today but I like to blog it and enter it because readership enjoys reading all sorts of different type of poetry. That is defiantly your typical teenage poetry where you use cliche phrases to describe what you are really trying to say, I have moved past that in my writing now a days and have now found that using concrete objects speaks more than using those cliche phrases.Â
-KatelynÂ
Katelyn Dermes,
Excellent Verse. Congrats on your nominationÂ
Regards
WILLIAMSJI MAVELI
Thank you.Â
Katelyn Dermes,
I really like the above lines
Regards
WILLIAMSJI MAVELI