Poem -
Family Ties
A brother that would punch another brother in the balls
Is the same brother that would walk away when you fall
He's not a brother at all
A sister that gossip and say what she please
Is the same sister that will mock and tease
She's not a sister to me
A mother that would go and leave you on the coast
Is the same mother that would abandon you when you need her the most
She's not a mother I can boast
A father that would do drugs and steal
Is the same man that would rob another man for a meal
He's not a father that real
But a friend who cares about you and asks you how you feeling
Is the same friend that allows you to still keep believing
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This is the second poem of many please feel free to follow, friend, or message me it would be awesome to talk to anyone who shares the same passion as I do
Terrence,
Such a sad rendition of all those, that say they are those that love you and you them....An individualist is he who has learned to depend on no other for support, are the well beings, One that asserts individuality by independence of thought and action in life but lonely to is he, who has no one to comfort his needs and no one to assist him in wronging his rights and complimenting his positive attributes and decision makings in life...Friends are true but family are those that memories are made for and with and when all else in life has been fell upon, it's these same feelings we find solace in and that we use to find support through, during our times of, crept in loneliness, to once again be back home..... At one point in life, all the above people that have let you down at the present, accompanied you while your growth in life with smiles and familiar warmth, that is now lacking. Hope all pans out with your family members, no matter how corrupt things may be or feel to you right now, we always have to realize, they are still our family and that we all have problems we have to work on in order to make amends to others, some just seem to work harder then others and their decision and sense of (compassion ) to me ,the (7th-sense),to think more of others than themselves, finally decides to kick in...Hopefully theirs kick in before they loose you forever....The poem is a very nice one..although it leaves you feeling the disparity of the poet...which is what it sought out to do...
Keep your head up,
Jim
First off I just wanted to say that what you said and the way you said it was amazing. As a lover of what I like to call "The finer language" I felt the compassion and yet apathy of the words you spoke to me. Though I must admit with great contrary to the poem my family life is stupendous and I would not wish it any other way. In this piece though I was not trying to put out sadness or a sense of melancholy feeling toward family, but the true message was the last four wards you spoke to me in your reply. Keep your head up that's the true moral of the poem, yet in order to show hope and the ability to conquer you must first instill fear and sadness. Fro without fear and sadness there would be nothing to over come.
Thank you for your reply and please check out my other poem"A Step in the Right Direction". If you haven't done so already
Thank you,
Terrence
Hey Terrence,
You are quite welcome and you presented this, as clear as day itself and did a great job at it. It humbles me dearly to know that you weren't the individual spoken of in your poem and your ability to interject your imagination into this poem in the realistic manner in which you did, plays so close, to the truth of what is felt and and wished did not exist in many unfortunate lives, into todays' society ...Thus states you have done your home work in your attempt and succession, to capture the pure essence of your delivery to your audience...Simply divine and i shall do as such, roam through the gardens of your planted poems on this site...Your conveyance was perfect and we all wait for the next poem, to mature for it's day of plucking to be read by us all...
Thank You,
Jim
You are so cool! I have finally met someone who shares the same way of presenting words and feeling in same way I do. Though sometimes I did wonder is during my exploration of this big,wide, open world if I would find a person whose writing can capture and pull me in. I can tell by the way of your writing you are an author, a story writer, a dream maker a goal that every man woman and child should try to ascertain . My vocabulary is very far-fetched from the average fifteen year old's of this time and age and I know by the way you speak to me you see me as an equal. I respect you so much for not taking the high road of arrogance or tyranny that most adults would take and go as far as to belittle one's own work. When you speak of my writing it captures me and cultivates me, so I assume in a larger sense what I am trying to say is.....you are a good writer. Keep doing what your doing you'll touch someone someday. Heck, maybe the world will clammier to hear your voice and see your words written down on the pages of eternity as we know it. I know......I already have!
Terrence,
Did you really just say you were (15), young man you have the whole world available to your knowledge and to your disposal, of any and all deficiencies it may throw at you, whichever suits your fancy....You really take me away with your literature and with the composition of its deliverance, I am in (Aw) of you and keep doing what you do, you are as grown and respectful as you allow yourself to be and I take my hat off to your knowledge, for your age and in fact age is only a number and you young man have proved just that to all that ventures this site....Keep doing and being you, it fits you well....You made me giggle when I saw the word,(ascertained)....Great job young man, that was very grown up and you are equal to all things possible and all that post their deepest thoughts, ideas and hearts on this site....Go get them (Tiger).....My money is on you....
Later,
Jim
Hello Terrence,
What a profound and brilliant piece of work! What I found so intriguing about the poem is its ability to make the reader question his or her own family dynamic i.e., am I the mother whom I would like to be? am I the wife whom I would like to be? am I the big sister whom I would like to be? etc. I applaud you for your ability to remain so humble and true throughout the piece, no matter how strong or uncomfortable the feelings may have become. I love the fact that, from the very beginning of the poem to the end, your tone was consistent and pure. Thank you for sharing your talent with us!