Poem - 11 June 2014, 08:35

Frustrated..!

Feelings both happy and said
Confused with what has made me mad
Smile is coming on my cheeks soo red
Again it is fading with tears so wet..!

I don't know what has happened to me
I want to fly I want to be free
Words can't explain the things I see
I want to cry while bending on my knees...!

Is it the feeling of losing someone
Or pain of getting neglected by my loved one
I am so upset I don't know the reason
Its too irritating..someone help me to run..!

I know everything but I can't explain
Soo many things messed up I am getting insane
I just wish to go and stand in the rain
Where no one can see my tears and my pain..!

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AUTHOR WILLIAMS...11 June 2014, 08:44

Surabhi Saxena,

Good write, I love the below lines, My five stars

I know everything but I can't explain
Soo many things messed up I am getting insane
I just wish to go and stand in the rain
Where no one can see my tears and my pain..!

Love

WILLIAMSJI MAVELI

Surabhi Saxena11 June 2014, 10:16

Thank you Sir..:) I am glad you loved it..!! Thank you for the stars..:)
Love
Surabhi

Tony Taylor11 June 2014, 08:58

Miss Saxena, Great rhyme scheme on this poem.....it made me sad, with you standing in the rain...it was heartfelt and moving........thank you.......well done.....tony

Surabhi Saxena11 June 2014, 10:17

Thanks a lott Tony ..I am glad you liked my work..Your comments are really appreciating..:)
Regards and Love
Surabhi

Ravindra Kumar11 June 2014, 23:29

Dear Surabhi,

"Opening lines are explaining the real grief of mind,...rhyme scheme is also perfect,..I like-

"Feelings of both happy and sad

Confused with what has made me mad

Smile is coming on my cheeks so red

Again it is fading with tears so wet..!"

Thank you,

Surabhi Saxena14 June 2014, 04:06

Thanks a lott dear Ravindra,..:)
Regards
Surabhi

Nardine Sanderson12 June 2014, 00:55

Surabhi beautiful princess, i feel your pain, ill stand in that rain with you hand in hand of loving friendship, do not be afraid to fly, to jump, to sing, you are an amazing talented, beautiful lady, you will fly sweetheart xx much love Nardine xx

Surabhi Saxena14 June 2014, 04:09

Thank you soo muchh..My loving friend for your loving and caring words ..they do mean a lot to mee..:) Thank you for being with me..in all my pain..Your b'ful words took away all my grief..:)
Love
Surabhi