Poem -
Grave House
Hear a heart~cries
Here a heart lies​
Within ballooningÂ
Blubberish skin
Bed riddenÂ
Gluttonous sin.
Turn to food,
Huge appetite, your mental supportÂ
Save this one
From the many he's becomeÂ
Drowning in outstretched flesh
Gorge; Privy upon see-food diets.
They all have given up,
Given up....is everydays slogan.
Sneezes unblessed
Dates set, watchful death
A family bet
That old ticker will attack
Swear wrong healthy sons,
When obituaries read:
There lies dear Dad,
Like 1 Pin it 0Choked his last meal, flat on fat back.
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It is very ironic im now noticing with the posting ofy 500th poem that it'd be about a morbid 500 pound fat man, but it is and I hope people see this as a message and not poking fun. Obesity is serious letting go of oneself can be helped, thats where care comes in, for yourself and for others. My thanks goes out to cosmofunnel and all those who supported me to reach this goal.
Gotta say great idea of a write, an tho these people deserve to get the help they need before it gets to far,  i have to be honest like alcoholics,  drug addicts i wish  them well and to get better, but i have no sympathy for them..maybe a good slap with the reality stick would be more help, cos the sympathy thing obviously dont work as its an increasing problemÂ
As a poem its a daring write, not one ive seen bebefore, so kudos for originality :)
Well I gotta say thank you Twisted, good to see you on my page. Your right though, this is a disease a very disgusting one that we can definitely lump into the category of drugs and alcohol. Why you would want to eat yourself to death I don't know, I'd rather go out the leaving las vegas way and drink myself to death than end up looking like that. Thanks for recognizing the format helps with the delivery of my words.Â
Devon, I think you can't write a flat poem anymore, I swear....five hundred posted on the 'mother ship'...simply awesome; I know I haven't written 500 poems in my entire life, so congrats pal....yes this one is 'well penned'; no worries I didn't think you were making fun of anyone, it is respectful in my view; I don't know enough about this condition to even form an opinion, on what causes it, but obviously it shortens the lifespan and is generally unhealthy....this poetic essay is well written... great job, for originality and execution...a very relevant subject that is  addressed with  sobering clarity....cheers pal  Â
I got a wicked grin going reading this comment. Wow! Well iam as surprised as you are that I have written 500, andto hear how much you are enjoying my writes of late gives me the encouragement that iam expanding in my writing. I believe some of these obesity diseases have something to do with mental disorders, depression as well. Thanks man I really appreciate the encouragement.