Poem - 04 January 2020, 13:48

It’s all good

It’s ok

You got to be good,
to live in the hood.
You have to be grand,
and make a wise plan.
The future is certain so
dont draw the curtain...
just ride it my dear and
don’t show no fear.
This colour is Gold,
we all look so old,
Everything is dusty and
the roofs are rusty.
Think we’re finally
seeing the mess,
Beyond the fools
with all the success.
Im sure there’s not
much more to prove,
so have some fun
and get some groove.
In the day and not the night,
the world is great,
a fine delight...
So see beyond
your colour TV,
shed some light,
and let it be.
WITHOUT THE SUN
there is no one,
without the sun
there is nothing..
This is the truth
without a doubt.
Volcanos reign
and so does Drought.

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Epic

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Happiness

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Katina Woodruff...05 January 2020, 07:27

Nice rhyme scheme.

Favorite part:

You got to be good,
to live in the hood.

The "hood" being any home, to house anyone. This is how I read the first few lines. Where did you draw your inspiration from?

I really like the rhyme scheme of your poem, it carried me until the very end.

Other Favorite Part:

This colour is Gold,
we all look so old,
Everything is dusty and
the roofs are rusty.

This is where the story unfolds, for me that is. The color of "gold" to maybe represent the riches in life, or a lack of. I like how you listed,

Everything is dusty and
the roofs are rusty.

When you write, "Everything is dusty and" I took this to mean, all the small yet significant aspects of life are, "dusty" in appearance. There is a lot going on in the world, and the news only captures a shadow of what is happening around the world. This is how I read it. I could be way off.

Thanks for sharing your poem.
Good work!

Katina

Todd Densem06 January 2020, 00:13

Katina ,
Thankyou for your comment. It’s my first poem and you read it well . The fires are bad here but it’s just stated raining, hope the fires stop soon love Todd.

Katina Woodruff...06 January 2020, 12:56

The first, wow! You should feel so proud of yourself. I enjoyed reading the poem very much.

You did an amazing first poem.

I cannot wait to read more.

This is a wonderful writing community. I've been a member since mid-December and I've had the most fun learning more about poetry and about writing in general.

Have a great day full of new inspiration.