Poem -
Jumbo jet vs jackdaws or jays
If only we could fly like
those that tweet or hoot
without aid of jet or
parachute
For I sure don't like
wings that roar
just so they can take off
and soar
Ah, to fly without petrol, diesel
or fuel
Oh, to halt that taloned midair
duel
Birds they don't pollute
the air
nor need they any airline
fare
So if only I too could rise
and glide
and let the wind be my
sole guide
I'd be happy to fly all the
way to 'em' stars
if I was assured I'd risk
no charring scars.
Flying without aviation
formalities
I could be sightseeing
many more cities
Ah I so wish to fly just
like a jay or jackdaw
Then I'd fly across all and
every border
For I'd know nor follow
no man-made law.
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Comments
Interesting poem I wrote a poem
ahout a butterfly with one wing
i like your concept
welcome to Cosmofunnel
Keep writing you are talented
angel
Warm thanxxx angel, I would luv to read your poem, at times I can read hundreds of poems at a time, I just love poems ESP those that rhyme and which I understand. Take care.
Wonderful dream
Yeah flying is a dream that I often see. Perhaps in the after life it shall be realised hereafter. Thanks for your comment.
Yeah flying is a dream that I often see. Perhaps in the after life it shall be realised hereafter. Thanks for your comment.
gosh the repeat button.
Hello S.zaynab...
I actually moved to what they call a Forest...
I didn't actually realize until the first night I stayed here...
Having been here for a few days, it's amazing...
Trees galore, I even saw a Bat the other night...
Fireflies everywhere, they make the trees sparkle...
Birds, oh my gosh!
It sounds and feels like a Rain Forest here...
I even saw a white Possum...
So cute!
If you're an Angel, you'll fly...
If you believe it, you can achieve it...
Great write!
Thank you for sharing...
Hugs...
sparrowsong
Wow u saw such exotic animals lucky u! Warm thanx for the interesting review, yeah let's pray we can fly like angels in the next life. This world it is only a dream. Take care.
Wow u saw such exotic animals lucky u! Warm thanx for the interesting review, yeah let's pray we can fly like angels in the next life. This world it is only a dream. Take care.
lovely write much enjoyed x
Warm thanx dear.
All previous comments are very true. With this poem you show more than 1 form of talent. Its a beautiful idea, beautifully wrote.
if the reader hasn't already dreamt of this they certainly will by the end of your work here.
great write
I'm glad to inspire dreams, thanx soo much for your lovely feedback.
S.Zaynab, well, welcome to CFunnel, I also have recently joined and love the forum, the people are amazing, give great feedback. Glad to see your poem reached the Nomination level, it feels very rewarding.
thank you for your comments on my poem 'Shark Attack'.. I love your work, your ryhme like myself and the story is easy to follow, great write on the '4 Js' keep writing and I have added you to my 'following' group. We have excellent poets on this site!!
Faith xo
Hello then fellow newbie, yeah the poets are good here and am glad they do rhyme for other places they like doing freeverse more. Oh I didn't know I reached a nomination level, thanx for letting me know. Luv yer work too. Glad to be friends. Take care.
Hi there, great poem. Really enjoyed. You've highlighted some good points here.
- Syd
Thanks a bunch for the feedback.
You're very welcome.
- Syd
Very good write! Loved the effortlessly flow throughout this piece, well written ???
Thanks soo much poet Wayne.
Beautifully written and well described, I myself am fascinated by flight and the dynamics and engineering it takes to lift a jumbo jet of the ground but when I'm on board a flight I feel nothing and wish I could be on the wing instead, I want to crawl around the engine as it takes off and be apart of flight.
Thanks for comment, interesting. Ah aeroplanes copied these birds, birds are more efficient n better, they don't crash or pollute. Cheers.
Dear S. zaynab,
As I promised, I have written this poetic response to your very profound poem.
I am flying like an Eagle
My Soul I now set free
I am soaring through the Heavens
As my spirit carries me
.
No restrictions on my flight plan
Destination at my whim
I think I have decided
To visit Grand Canyon's Rim
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Wow wow wow poet Larry your poem comment had me soaring, swept me quite off my feet. Thanks soo much for this lovely poem that tags nicely with the same connotations as mine.
Dear S. zaynab,
In the 1950's, a famous American singer, named Sam Cooke, sang a lovely song called "You Send Me".
Your beautiful poetry has the same affect on me.
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Aw great, I read the lyrics it's a sweet n lovely song eh. Thanks soo soo much for liking my poetry. Have a great great day dear poet.
This is really good! Made me smile! Love the flow of the poem and some very clever rhyming involved.
Then on top of that, you have the message you are transmitting here too. The man made v nature. ???
Thanks so much for a lovely understanding comment! Cheers.
I love this poem! it's a new and interesting perspective. I hope to see more awesome poetry from you!
Warm thanxx for your lovely feedback. I liked your poems too! Take care.
an ancient dream, a wish of many, elegantly described by one.