Poem -
Languidly Basking
Like 5 Pin it 2I love this simple tranquil feeling
Eyes half closed
Head back
Studying the contours
Of my cobwebbed
Artex ceilingPleasantly plastered
Praying to the artex God
Soft spirals spinning through my coconut head
I wish this was real
Soft touch and feel
Bordering the living and the deadDo not disturb
Don't wake me up
Summer sun, bumble bees, buttercupsBasking in the smooth
Forgetting tomorrows rough
A mirrored pond
Peace and still
Ingesting medicine but I'm not illDo not worry
Just let me be
I'm a tourist
Politely asking....
A shark languidly basking...In a sea
A sea of artificial tranquillity
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Hey SYD!!....LOVE the way your words live up to the anticipation from your title:...... the intent delivered well..... and the loveliness of this lay in the absolutely, perfect word choices......... beautifully done dear poet brother!!.........VERY well conceived, and delivered!!....... Much Love to you and yours!!!...... high fives brother!!.......PINNED:!........Love & Rockets!!......T xo ??✴✴❤❤✴✴????
P.S....gotta read this again & again!!
Hi Tony, thanks so much for your positive feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. It feels like a while since I've written anything. Thanks for the pin also.
Take care - Syd xo
I really loved the ambiguous metaphorical referencing here, Syd.
In other words (although I suck at interpreting modern contemporary freestyle poetry), I ain't too sure exactly what this is about but I love the way it's worded.
The lyrics to Pink Floyd's hit "Comfortably Numb" immediately came to mind.
If I'm anywhere in the vicinity of the ballpark you're pitching from I'm sure you'll let me know.
Good stuff regardless.
~Dean ♫♪?♪♫ ?♫♪?♪♪♫
Hi Dean if this poem brings Pink Floyd - Comfortably Numb into your head then I'm honoured. It's a bit abstract I know. I'll inbox you the exact inspiration behind it later....But let's just say I was enjoying the view of the complexity of my artex ceiling after a few drinks. Nothing sinister.
Thanks so much for your feedback.
Take care - Syd
Dear Syd,
I am basking in the sunshine
Of my convoluted brain
My thoughts bring out the billowed clouds
Ideas upon me rain
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Thank you Larry. Well crafted words, expertly done.
Love & Peace also
- Syd xxx
Nice one Syd! I enjoyed this a lot!☺
Thank you John. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. It's feels like a while since I've written anything.
Take care - Syd