Poem - 28 January 2020, 13:49

LETS talk...

The silence
Is deafening
Grating
Uncomfortable
Like music
Badly played
A violin
That screeches
Screams
Distorting words
We do not say
And
Our poor love
Vibrating
On the table
Where it lays
Abondoned
And
Dying
In the deafening
Screams
Of silence.
Marion Price(2020)

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Jill Tait28 January 2020, 14:01

Brilliance Marion ❤️❤️❤️Pinned again u r on a roll today ❤️❤️❤️

Marion29 January 2020, 06:11

Well...you are being too kind, but I accept? have you noticed that we write to an internal beat and when it is reread, there is a different beat drumming and the flow of it doesn't sound right anymore? Am I making sense, does this happen to you Jill?
it makes me want to tinker with what iv written all the time. There...you've just had all my internal thoughts of the last five minutes in response?? thanks Jill ?

Jill Tait29 January 2020, 06:15

Ay I rewrite too many times haha we must be the same us poets lol ?❤️?

A Lonely Journey28 January 2020, 14:15

Marionette!
I wish you'd stop writing so well, you're really making me look bad.
Try this:
I am sad, not very glad
I cry a lot, like a heated pot
I wish I wasn't
A complete sot

And then continue on, as to make me look better. Deal? Thanks.
Kidding! I love your writing, it's marvelous(I make myself look bad, not you. lol).
Wonderful poem!!
Matthew.

Marion29 January 2020, 06:16

Lol...I did write exactly like that for Greg's challenge...er...and I think Jill and I won? ??...seriously Matthew you are too kind in your comments ...but I'm not complaining?..thankyou ??(IV just worked out that that emoji is a hug...I thought he had just enjoyed a meal...but no...it's definitely a hug ok) ??

Nine Eleven28 January 2020, 14:32

Silence can be such a beautiful gift but unfortunately when silence comes between our loved ones, it can be a silent explosion, a bomb that hurts, I've seen this before, I've heard it and I have lived within its eye.

We screamed, we wrestled, anything but silence.

Marion29 January 2020, 06:19

Hi Gerald, yes, lack of communication kills most relationships and yet it's the first thing we all do...stop speaking to the person and....fester in silence. Thankyou ?