Poem -
Licking Razor Blades
Too much time spent licking razor blades
Hanging with the prehistoric beasts
Tearing rotten flesh
Foul...
Deep in the Everglades
Lazy in the sullen swamp
Forgetting the motion of the ocean
The magic of the moonlit beach
The rhythmic slapping of the cooling waves
Finally finding the right remedy
Previously using the wrong lubrication
Pouring parched dry Earth
Into rusted joints
Futile attempts at literate rebirth
Yes... too much time
Licking razor blades
Suckig the last ink
From the quill...
Crimson salt of a
Hedonistic lifestyle
Sedative & stimulant addiction
The danger has lost its thrill
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Comments
You use such vivid metaphors that really work. The first two lines really draw the reader in. Easily deserves 5 stars but I wish I could give it more x
Thank you so much for your kind comment. Comments such as these inspire writers to keep writing.
- Syd
Syd, you should 100% keep writing!! Don't ever stop writing. You have such a talent and you are able to write in the style that top poetry critics love! Your writing is awesome! Dont ever stop or give up...please...don't x
Aw thanks so much! And likewise...I've stopped by your page and there are some real gems.
When I have time I will read and comment on many more of your poems.
Take care - Syd
xx
whoa brilliant read
Thank you so much Laurette
Fab write Syd ?
Thank you so much Marion.
- Syd
You're welcome ?