Life

Favorite lines: 

Nobody forces us to dream.
Nobody forces us to fall in love.
Nobody.

I like that it was short and stayed with the same emotion throughout which was somber to some degree. If that is the best word to use. I think you could expand the poem in some areas, to elaborate on why life is so challenging. You could also add a little humor but it's not a must just an idea. 

I think there are a lot of circumstances in life and I know first-hand that some tragedies are unplanned, unwanted and not chosen by an individual, experiences that make or break a person's spirit in life. 

When depressed, my view of the world is grim, so when I write during those times it is reflected in the literature. When I'm happy, it can be revealed also in a poem. We can choose to wear a blindfold about the crises in life and place blame on ourselves for not being good enough, or doing a good enough job to make the situation better although, there is the element of faith, hope, trauma and mental illness which can greatly affect how a person lives and what they experience.

I'm just searching for words to help you with your poem. It inspired me to write, so thank you. I also really like the image of the cat with his head through the bread it's totally adorable. 

You don't have to change anything about the poem, it's good the way that it is. But if you should add to it, I'd be happy to review it again. Good work! 

Cheers, 
Katina
 

It's very hard to say to someone who's opened a vein to script their words to read. You put yourself out there for others to strip every scrap of dignity from your etchings. For me, the hardest part is over and the one who has opened their vein so others can read is truly the most gifted. well written piece. I cannot find one single fault to your ink. well done

I really like this, so raw and true. Pure feeling and emotion can be felt through this. Keep it up.100 points 

Liked and pinned for your genius words! this is a great write, no criticism needed (or so I think) but very well done!