Poem - 04 July 2013, 04:17

LULLING ALWAYS

Sayed Thangal

Tickling the leaves I watch their laugh

Dancing merrily together.

Push from behind them forward

Thus chuckling with waves.

Always I come to your home

Receive me with pleasure,

I'm calm, calm very calm

Which make your body warm.

You feel hot and dry

I bring then the thick clouds.

Me provide the night sleepy calm

To make your tiring bed relax.

Often I change my track

Myself impossible to control

Very sorry to see

I'm furious and harm then !

sayed thangal

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Sayed Thangal04 July 2013, 04:27

Dear friend,

how do you evaluate this poem?

Sayed Thangal04 July 2013, 04:46

Dear Shahjehan,

thanks for the comment, expect your full support,bye

Sayed Thangal04 July 2013, 06:23

Thanks for your sharing , I accept all criticism whether it is positive or negative in the right sense,

feel free to open your mind , all suggestions will have certain qualities

best wishes

Mara Diaz04 July 2013, 06:29

I agree with Wiliam in everything he says about this poem. Congrats on your win! I really liked it. :)

Sayed Thangal04 July 2013, 06:45

Dear Mara Diaz,

Thanks first, still, try to find out any problems that a poem has , it would better for the poet to improve some thing, it is symbolic poem , the air or wind is the speaker here. bye

Asmaa As-siddiq05 July 2013, 12:59

congrats on this poem sayed lovely as always,i see that u dont mind criticism but in my opinion you're poem cant be wrong or right just changes because poetry can never be wrong just put into different thoughts,as long as the poet likes it then it perfect!

Sayed Thangal05 July 2013, 20:01

Thanks a lot for your comment and encouragements,