Me You No Them
I meant something once
Once I was a love of Lifetime,
Birth, captured two
Changed me and you
For a while we adapted
Learned
Becoming leaders of future
Future resting firmly in our hands.
Self sacrifice beneficial
To know there's something more than yourself,
Light shines brighter
With joy, smiles and laughter increase the light,
And me
And you, love them unconditionally.
Looked back on
The lost who constantly looked,
Found, in a circle of love
Said love, on same page we find
Being the world for setting eyes
Eyes setting shine upon the world.
With all the bad bypassed through us
Us, a mere sunset
On frozen times
To be thawed by independent hearts
Once aspired by the inspired,
~You and me~
See,
Them love from ours,
Proud their found as we've found, no love is love
Without them.
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Hello Devon, beautiful write, I felt the love, the sacrifice, the protection,the responsibilities and the joy of being a family. Molding a great future through our children is the great task but the rewards knows no boundary. Thanks for sharing this wonderful write. Cheers.
Thank you so very much Cleo, im trying out this new style of writing so glad you seen the qualities that two people juggle when their love is tested by their love for the children, it is so hard to be the two people you once were before you have kids, remembering that and trying to find common grounds keep love going. A wonderful comment I appreciate so much, cheers.
He D!!.......this is such an interesting write.........not just because of the Love shared between you 5...........but you're doing something with your style here...........I can't quite put my finger on it...........it's like you've removed all the ands, ifs, buts, how's, & why's.........so your poem comes out with a kind of staccato rhythm to it..........hmmmm?...........i'll figure it out eventually............anyway, I like it...........it's got something compelling about it..........creative brother.........but I know you've been testing the waters a lot of late.........stay curious my friend.............well done.............T xo
Thank you so much T. I just wanted to see if my attempts at something new was working and your comment
assures me im on the right track. I got some advice and started working on this style which is completely freestyle but sometimes the beginning word of the line ends the line which is called shadow style, I liking it too. Always dabbling brother you know me. Ill be coming your way soon.
Hey Devon I can totally relate to this write . I have lived this . Making time for your love but balancing the attention your kids want is a delicate thing .you are writing out of your zone with this one but you did a great job. Â You have 3 beautiful daughters and a great dad to boot . Rock on with your writes bro . RockÂ
Thanks Rocky lol, I've had a tough time dealing wiyh the balancing act lately the love im giving isn't what im receiving and it has been stressing me into some abnormal depression. I can't understand if this is just a transition were going through or a possible unfortunate ending which I hope not. Ill try and keep my head up and enjoy the compliment you gave me appreciate that brother for relating and all the support.