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Jac Tales

It sounds like a melody. Great Write. πŸ™‚

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Rory McGinlay

I liked (the changes)Β 
Dare I say, there's been a rewrite.
I'm all about reinterpretation.

Something unseen
That you feel has always been there,
Eating away at a love one.

It's eaten away at me, I feel I'm old enough to say.

I like to think that just means we're close

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Shirley Harrison

Hello dear Rory,  this indeed up for interpretation as storms come in many varieties and emotional attachments are always high. I'm completely humbled by your wonderful review and even more so because you have noticed, I've changed the title a few times, I'm quite happy with it now. Senryu is a form I love because in 3 lines, one has to paint a picture and share the emotion. Try one I will give you some encouragement anytime. Thank you dear friend. 🌹

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