Poem -
Murdering Mary
In the atrocious moments of murdering
And the aftermath of bloods display
The coagulation of truth and lies
Befuddles the Sherlocks wide array
Intestines spell Mary across the wall
And floorboards smell of rodents decay
The heartbeat of Lucifer's ruthless disciples
Sends angels everywhere to herald the day
And while eating the livers of twisted daughters
The murderers enjoy tasting the tears and salted pain
Then,
The final moment of disembowelment
Is there to be toasted
And shredded into appetizers
Waiting for Mary's blood sauce
To fill the gravy boats
And roasted...
Tony Taylor
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Brutal. Very 'Hannibal Lector'
Awesome SYD!!.....you nailed it!!...... my Hannibal tribute!!..... smiles and thanks my friend!!......T xo ?☀✴✳
Thanks. You're welcome Tony
Hi Tony love this poem of fiction? Lol well hope so. Great imagery and cleverly written as always :)
Lol!!....thanx WENDY!!.....'tis a work of primal fiction....... promise!...... appreciate it girlfriend .......smiles......T xo ?☀✴✳
Awww...This gave me goose pimples...Nice but scary thought....You got the "midas touch" dear friend...LOVE and ROCKETS!!
Thanks dear ROSE!!.....NICE?.....are you sure?...... cuz I tried REALLY hard to make this NOT NICE...... smiles!.......T xo ?☀✴✳♥
Yeah...I'm very sure...LOL...can you really make anything NOT NICE?...It's not in you and so you can't pull it...Trust me...
Ye gods, Tony...this is grim! And not a little bloodthirsty!!
Leaving aside the, frankly, disturbing imagery and the (even more disturbing!) gleeful way you salivate over every tiny detail..
What's particularly impressive about this poem is the strength if the volta ... rather than merely turning direction with this...the single-word line, "Then," stops the reader in her tracks with a dagger to the heart, before moving on to your chilling denouement.
Fantastic line!! ... you are a sick puppy, Taylor...a very sick puppy!!
I love it!!!
J ;)
Yay!!....thanx so much JASON!!..... I'm laughing as I write this...... you're funny!!..... no bout-a-doubt it!! (smiles)..... what? Another awesome comment?!.......I actually had to go look up "dénouement".....I can't tell you how much I appreciate that....... your understanding of the poetic form is such a great thing to share.... which you do brilliantly...... It gives me a much greater understanding and appreciation for communicating structure and formatting.....I am SO glad that you're on this site brother poet....,. not only do you share generously...... but you help, subtly & profoundly, those around you!!......I believe we call that being " A gentleman and a scholar!"...... smiles...,... what?..... I've mentioned that before!...... go figure! ? stay groovy my friend!!!........ LOVE and ROCKETS!!......T xo ?☀✴✳
Murder HE wrote lol ? You are really a versatile poet, I take my hat off ## oh! I love scary murder cases## looking forward to the next case ### LOVE AND ROCKETS!!!
Thank you LEAH!!....,. Murder She Wrote was one of those shows I watched from time to time..... just because (like you) I love a great mystery/murder.....I hadn't thought about it.... but perhaps I will do another write like this one.... and make it more "Murder HE Wrote" !!......smiles......thanx again dear poet sister !!.......Hugs-n-Smiles!!......T xo ?☀✴✳
I meant it was a captiving addition to the creative art of poetry. It is quite original and his it's own style, it will likely appeal to those persons that more traditional poetry does not.
Best of Luck,
A big fan Carey Yoquelet
Exquisitely written
A blood bath of creative fiction
I especially like the intestinal inscription
Murdering Mary is an intriguing addition
Hey thanx CAREY!!.....Love this comment brother......positive feedback is what most of us look forward to ....especially from fellow wordsmiths.....I'm a little curious about what you meant by "intriguing addition"?.....regardless.....I appreciate you taking the time brother poet!!.....stay groovy!!.......smiles......T xo ?☀✴✳
WOW Tony do you know that jack the rippers last victim was Mary Kelly and she died just like your photo where did you get the ida for this wow
Hey GREG!!....thanx for the positive feedback.....and as to the origins......I know you've been following the RIPPER series on HISTORY CHANNEL from Cherie.....but I've actually been writing these gory type pieces for a few years......I think it was POE'S influence originally.....but I'm psyched to check out that series.....Cherie says you've been talking about it with her....so we plan to check it out soon!!.....thanx so much for ALL your support brother......talk to ya soon!!......smiles......Txo ?☀✴✳
Tony
oh yes! My friend a masterpiece written in blood to stain a ring around that bath tub ... I love this... ofcourse I visit my dark side often glad to see you visited yours
hats off to you
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-luke-
YES!!!....I had a feeling you'd like this if you got the chance to see it.....We've both been a little busy of late it seems....or maybe I just keep missing your posts......But i'm grateful that you were able to catch this one .......It's always a pleasure to tap into that side of creativity's potential......I've done a bunch of them and whenever I post them people seem surprised......but it's all a part of the process for me......thanx SO MUCH for the "Hats off!" brother poet!!.....truly appreciated!!......hope all is well with you!......big smiles!.......T xo ?☀✴✳♥
Oh my oh my, Tony......there is a very naughty corner of your mind where Ravens lurk..... loving the brutality and gore and bludgeoned imagery!! you are truly a wordsmith of total mastery- the good, the bad and the downright bloody!!!!! ...as always, great work my friend ...but you are now a conjurer of nightmares and I'm loving them! xxxx
Lodigiana
Powerful and dramatic piece designed to make an impact !!
Staggering crescendo to a heart thumping boiler !!
Keep up the great work.
Wishing you the best. :)
This is awesome! I love it!
-MK