Poem -

MOTHERLOVE...

I walk behind you
Collect your tears
You will need them
When you stop crying
And are thirsty again.

Marion Price(2020)
 
 

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Steve Anc

Hmmmm.... I have read this poem more than five times, am still at sea... great work but I wish to  know the meaning of
"you will need them
when you stop crying"

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Marion

Hey Steve, thankyou so much for taking the time to reread, I'm honoured. The meaning isn't too clear, you are right and of course as the reader the meaning is entirely yours. But I wrote it because, as mothers( and father's) we have to stand back and try not to interfere too much as our children negotiate the pain of life. We can only 'be there'
in the background and help in quiet ways. So the tears are collected by the loving mother who has no power to stop them, but collects them, because she knows that when the tears eventually stop, the child will drink of life again and she holds the cup safe, in love for them...thankyou my friend ?

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Marion

Hey Jill...thankyou. IV only been off a few nights but IV allocated three hours tonight to catch up on all you've written in my absence...lol...hugs ?

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Being Me

Oh I love this...a very poetic idea to collect the tears for when they are needed next...as if there is only a limited amount...so better save them where you can. Beautiful words exquisitely put x

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Marion

Hey BM...advice please?
which version do you think is best as it seems to be confusing people in its cryptic message

The original
Or...

I walk behind you
Collect your tears
You will need them
When you stop crying
And are thirsty again
Your cup
Held safe
In motherlove.???

Which version do you think is better
Thankyou my friend ?

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Marion

And thankyou for your lovely comment and I'm honoured by the pin...and grateful for advice ...it stays ??

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Being Me

Hmmm  they are both good but personally I prefer it the way it is. I thought it pretty easy to understand...what with the title and the way it is written. But your poem...your choice. I think it a beautiful, well polished piece of work x

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Marion

Thankyou my friend...it is sometimes difficult to know just how much to put in and what to leave out and we can all do with a little help, appreciate it BM...( Hope Matthew doesn't catch me calling you BM again...lol..??)  hugs ?

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Being Me

You are very welcome. I think it is important we all support one another. It is a community after all. 

Matthew is so funny, isn't he? x

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Marion

He is the most fabulous person...but don't tell him I said...?

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