Poem -
Porcelain Cracks
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Porcelain cracked
fault lines
meandering
capillaries
burst banks...
Like the Amazon
Bare light bulbs
stench...
GraffitiΒ
the broken latche
of a vandalized trap
acrid irritation of
a dripping tap
Dusty moths
colliding with the light bulb
lost souls...
asphyxiated algie ridden fish
looking for some resolve
Drenched in ultraviolet light
desperation of
the night club
the bass vibrates
the parasite gestates...
Meanwhile in another realm....
The imbicile swings his golf clubs
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Comments
a dark take on the government. it's a shame that choices regarding the presidential candidates. choice one: a molester, choice two: a cheater. and the Molester is winning; Wow what does that say about society? awesome wording. I love what you're saying here.
Hi Lisa, I take it you're a republican...if I'm right then there's certainly nothing wrong with that...Β If we all shared the same views then the world would certainly be a boring place .
A healthy debate is good. I've almost lost friendships to Qanon conspiracy theories and the fact that Trump would not denounce these outlandish claims because it would cost him votes really sealed the deal for me (even though I live in the uk)
Take careΒ - Syd xoΒ
I am neutral honest. I would be happy with just a decent president whether they are democrats or Republicans. Itβs such a shame that moralities are failing in society. I remember a few years back Dukakis was absolutely crucified for his affair he came clean and admitted to it but society nearly ran him out of office. I only want someone who can be trusted, if the government canβt conform to a higher moral standard how can they be trusted to run a country?Β
Amen xo
Wow Syd, it only got me after what you were referencing. I really enjoy your poetry when you use so very deep analogy. Very very clever in my opinion. Loved it a lot. Best wishes to you TFOTSΒ
Thank you so much Fish for your kind comment. My earlier writes (when I first started writing at around age 25) were always simple rhymes that told a story. It wasn't until I joined All Poetry a couple of years ago that I realised how important imagery is. Maybe you should drop by sometime? My pen name is False Sense on there...Syd was already taken.
Take careΒ - SydΒ
Sure Syd! Sounds cool, I'll definitely have a look sometime, Cosmo has got some sentimental value to me though, as I started my poetry journey on here. But I will definitely have a look at some of your work. Thanks sharing, best wishes to you. TFOTSΒ
Cosmo is my first home too Fish. That's why I always return here. If it wasn't for comments from fellow poets on this site then I may have gave up writing some time ago. I'm certainly not trying to steal poets to another site. I always return here myself...like a spawning fish lol
- Syd xoΒ
Awww it's fine Syd, it's a lovely place, the Comos, think my head would explode too if I had to manage 2 separate sites XD. I'm still interested in viewing your work though. Kind regards and best wishes to you. TFOTSΒ
Hi Syd...see...i didn't feel this as political at all...it actually described to me the sensation of being in nightclubs after a heart break...drunk, lonely knowing it was the last place I really wanted to be...lol...sorryπ fantastic write regardless. I'm.on all poetry too...can't do anything with the site to be honest ..
π
Hi Marion, your interpretation of this write is far more fitting to be honest. When I started writing it I had no intention of it being political. I've actually used the the same image on All Poetry to write some other garbled gibberish that didn't do the image justice so I wanted to use it again. The original was called 'Parboilled' after some crazy dream I had.
Those last two lines I just couldn't resist adding. They seemed so fitting at the time.Β
Thanks for your honest feedback. Really appreciated - Syd xo
Ps. When I first joined AP I couldn't get away it either...I couldn't understand most poems as it seemed like they were only written to impress the AI auto rank system. What is your pen name over there? I'll look you up.
Ah...I wouldn't bother Syd...it's only one or two i have posted here previously..they crashed there also lol.its ok there I suppose but nobody really engages do they.i am solstice angel I think...their choice not mine. Do you know of any other good sites Syd??
Hi Marion,Β
I will check out your poems regardless on AP. The thing I like about the site is that you can pin your best writes to your profile. Here on Cosmofunnel you have to dig back several months, years or whatever to find them.
My Poetic Side is a nice site even though I haven't posted for a while. It's a smaller community but friendly (so far) It has all sorts of tools so you can choose different texts, colours, borders etc. You can even create your own e book of poems so you can print them off. The site navigation takes some getting used to though.
As far as I can remember there is a lovely lady there named Faye Slim. For some reason I think the two of you would get along great.
- SydΒ xo
Ok...I will Google that...thankyou π
Great write Syd, but hey whilst this pandemics going on why not paint your bathroom?
Love the use of metaphor and words in this. I actually thought it was about class division but that's me π
Hi Pen, thanks for reading and commenting. I suppose the poem can be interpreted that way also. All the best for 2021.
- SydΒ
Woah sublime muse indeed and your vocab is top notch so poetic!. Kudos for this amazing poem. I liked the algae line lots. Kudos!!
plz eez do read and comment my newest poem too.
And happy new year poet!