Poem -
powerless
You render me powerless,
like a song without a note,
you said that you love me,
Your hands around my throat,
my insides frozen,
no sensation,
Just numb,
to think that I loved you, made me blind, made me dumb,
The chains you wounded around me still stained upon my skin,
but my heart it keeps on beating,
So you really didn't win
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Your 'Powerless' poem has real power of perfection, I think. The concluding lines are much convincing:-
"The chains you wounded around me
still stained upon my skin,
but my heart it keeps on beating,
So you didn't win."
Ravindra Kumar
Once powerless, becomes powerful, true word from you sir Ravindra Kumar, thank you kindly, much love xx
I appreciate you on appearing as the real bold lady. Women are only made powerful hereon the earth, it takes time to rise up them. Most of the people try to misuse their frailty which is greatest unpardonable sin always stands in the form of retaliation.
Thank you,
Ravindra KumarÂ
As human is as human does, i did contemplate retaliation, but as a strong heart does proceeding towards renewed memories, and happy ends, my friend, much love Ravindra xx
I am actually an aggressive person and recently was in this horrible relationship with this hooker and she cheated on me time after time and she would hit me so freakin hard sometimes and one day I choked her, and I shook her head violently and she just freakin laughed as I did this to her, but she was a hooker and used to this kinda treatment, then as it turns out it was kinda her thing to be abused, and still to this day I see her and she just wants me to abuse her little 25 year old body?? she loves it?? I am so rough with her, but not all girls like that shit and its good to write about it. I have many demons inside of me, writing helps me stay in tune with them ll. thanks your poem created a rise in me.
Thank you for your comments and so sad you suffer that way dear Matthew, much love sweetheart xx
A 'powerless' poem with a powerful message.  There is no disputing Nardine the message that you are sending.  I loved the comparisons you make with regard to your emotions and feelings, they created such striking imagery.  Wonderfully positive ending, UP YOURS in effect lol!  I could see this extended as a lyrical piece Nardine, a style of write that I love, great flow, great write, a vote and nomination from me:)
Thank you so much Rachel Gardiner, wow now i also see the lyrical side, thank your for your wonderful view and nomination, much love to you xx nardine :)