Poem -
Pretend
Pretend it’s my time to fake
Let’s pseudo equate
Take somthing good
“Tell-’em it’s great”
Don’t lie..
Exaggerate
Bitter sweet taste
Create that
Stupid look on a face
Challenge knowledge
Until it’s up in flames
Add to that fire
Fuel for inspire
Couple feet higher
“Until it’s a blaze”
Community “code..”
Gossip in blossom...
Smooth ride on a dirt road
Cooking up lunch on a burnt out stove
Selling value in a high intrest loan
Tell you what to be
Go on about your hay day
Don’t think of me
Remember what I say
lost in a job
the boss is the cause
Of misery and pain
Started out as work
“now it’s all play”
Comments
awesome Eddy!
Thank you so much Lisa . I really took a lot of time rearranging the stanzas and changing words to get what I was aiming for .. I hope it inspired and made the heat race a little to create a ambiance
WAOW!
Like I seriously love the way you write it's always so unique :)
Awesome write because even if I didn't completely understand I got the rush of emotions from it!
Omg thank you so much and that is EXACTLY what I aim for ...the rush .. I’m not telling a story I’m helping the reader create there own story.
thanks so much for the support
you are a great writer too
and I really get your intentions and respect and enjoy your poetry as well
I think you've captured such an important reality of today's society in such an unique (like Mitsali said) and alluring way! Very intelligently written, the abstractness is brilliantly woven with the message. Loved it! 👏🏽👏🏽
Thank you so much 😊dreamer .. You really chewed this up .. lol thanks for reading ..I know it got a rap vibe to it but it’s more like rock lyrics if anything😂
Hahaha aww! Well I love both rock and rap so it's awesome to me in both ways! 😂😊