Poem - 11 February 2019, 17:25

Pulled apart

the night falls in a heavy, suffocating cloak, cold and alone are we.
the emotion for which you lust
flares once, then dies,
smothered by your obsession.
all hope must end.

your love is no more.
how could you abandon me?
our dark emotions surround us, crying,
we have lost our light.

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287

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Tags:

Dark Pain

Poetry Genre:

Drama

Topic:

Mystery

7 comments

Comments

Ella H11 February 2019, 17:26

Thanks for reading my poem. I was trying to write something dark. Dont know how well that turned out, but thats ok! tell me what you think!

Ian William11 February 2019, 18:11

You chose your words wisely, it holds darkness throughout. You've intertwined nostalgia, abandonment and the evanescent nature of relationships, all encompassed under the suffocating cloak.

Ella H12 February 2019, 05:29

thanks lots!!

Silent Dreamer12 February 2019, 05:37

Absolutely terrific Ella!! My favourite lines:

the emotion for which you lust
flares once, then dies,
smothered by your obsession

You managed to create a sense of mystery that carries darkness and yet a unusual sense of clarity of what is happening in the last lines (I honestly would love for this to become a story). I loved it!

Ella H12 February 2019, 05:40

thanks so much!!