Poem -
Temple
My body’s a temple
pity I’m the only one worshipping
you can taste a sample
be careful my essence you’ll be cherishing
with my parts you’ll want to fumble
my curves and bends relishing
your hearts going to stumble
into my soul delving
it’s all about the tumble
before long we’ll be finishing
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Dear Susan,
its really fine. I liked it. get lucky buddy.Â
with regards
rochishmon
thanks Rochish x
ah Rachel thanks its worth writing it known I made you smile you are kind cheers x
Sounds great but I think the flow would be better with two more lines. Just my opinion though, great write Susan!
Im sure your right Matthew I usually write quick and leave them alone I'm sure if I looked again improvements could be made but that sounds like work not fun lol I'm glad you enjoyed and never be afraid to say anything to me Matthew feedback is always appreciated thanks x