Poem -
Temporary
Temporary...
Their shouldn't be such a word
Everything is temporary
Time is borrowed
Temporary joy
Excitement & sorrow
Liberties we take
False promises made
The granted taking of tomorrow
Infinite
Is finite
The dark void we dwell
The cosmos
Heaven
Hell
The double edged sword of sunlight
Gluttony
Fammin
War
Discrimination
The same biology
Separated by arms & technology
The forgotten miracle
That is creation
Temporary...
Every problem
Has a solution
If only we keep calm
For we are nothing but locusts
Blocking light
From the dense thickets of our swarm
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Cool write angel
Cool write angel
Thank you Angel for your feedback. I will stop by your page tomorrow as it is late here. I'm off to bed.
Take care - Syd
Hey SYD!!......I totally agree and admire the first half of this piece...... and then in its foray into tangents in the second half I found myself a little distracted by those ideas that were not helping its foundation........ regardless, always love your mind and thoughts brother!!...... some seriously well delivered poetic discourse here......LOVE and ROCKETS!!.......T xo ??✴?✴❤❤
Hi Tony, this poem was inspired by a book I'm reading...Permanent Midnight by Jerry Stahl.
I realize it doesn't have much imagery and it was written on whim. (I've had a drink as usual) but I've got to strike while the iron is hot if you get my meaning.
I always appreciate your constructive feedback. The poem will probably need editing in the morning.
Take care - Syd xo
Dude!!..... take it for what it is...... just a pat on the back to say how fuckin' good you are at what you do....... most of the best writers of the 20th century wrote with alcohol being a part (large or small) of their ability to complete manuscripts and outlines on a time schedule ......you my friend are the kind of writer who actually has something to say to this crazy world........I know this by reading between your lines of immaculate intent..... rock on bro!!..... There is NO fightin' the feelin'!........Kings to you brother!!.......peace.......T xo ?❤
Thank you Tony, your kind words are very much appreciated.
Peace also - Syd xo
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I liked the last stanza best, Syd.
It's very true, me thinks...
Nicely penned, friend.
~Dean
Hi Dean, yes that last stanza is also my favourite.
Thanks for reading and leaving feed back.
Take care - Syd
For me the ending leaves me in awe, we are swarms blocking light, individually we can't see this but as a whole we can see it clearly, a big fucking black hole absorbing light and giving nothing in return. Great write Syd.
Hi Gerard, I can tell that this is a subject you feel passionate about. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and those last lines. Thanks for reading and leaving feed back.
Take care - Syd
Dear Syd,
The "Temporary" woes of mankind
Last forever and a day
This word is an oxymoron
And should be cast away
.
For our live are all a pattern
Of everlasting pain
We think that we are happy
Then the darkness comes again
Love,
Larry xxx
Hi Larry, thank you so much for your comment.
I wish I could write as well as this. Expert words.
Love also
- Syd xxx
My Dear Syd,
You write every bit "as well", if not better!
Your words are the vessels that steer me to my own.
Love,
Larry xxx