Poem -
The Profligate
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A dissolute existence
sat in a darkened mahogany room
the profligate assesses
the ruinous effect of his actions
on his ebbing candlelight
Stale music plays
his anagapesis for such electronic sounds
now obvious as his smile inverts
Banal banging of techno beats
erode away his last fragmented thoughts
No longer sapient
consciousness melts....
Searing tallow and beeswax
drip from the isthmus that was his neck
self inflicted lacerations cut cleanly through bone and cartilage
his head now lies in his own course sordid hands
So much for living in the moment...
Burning candles at both ends
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Hey SYD!!...still catching up with stuff......this is STELLAR writing.....the elongated rhymes through the lines comes shining through as you approach poem's end......VERY clever brother!!......I haven't been back on ALL POETRY for a few......but I hope you get some recognition for this piece.....it has a kind purity that was forced out of you because you had to use some of the little-used words in our language.....at least for the masses!!......Bravo brother!!......Peace N Stuff!!.......T xo : )
Hi Tony, thanks for stopping by my page and catching up. I actually won gold for this picture promt competition. I came 1st out of 16 poets. I don't win many golds.
It's a very different style for me and I wrote it whilst sober which is also unusual. It's comments from everyone that keeps me writing, especially from the likes of you that gave me confidence when I first started.
Appreciated - Syd xo
My pleasure brother!!.....what you created there was definitely noteworthy, in my most humble opinion.......and I DO so look forward to more of your work as it progresses!!......I am your cyber-friend and admirer.......T xo : )
Wow! How did I ever miss this?
Very dark and extremely well written, creating vivid imagery! Clever writing, Syd x
Thank you so much Christina, it was written for a picture promt competition on another site and I actually won gold. It isn't my usual writing style.
Take care - Syd xo