Very cool and stylistic poem, Devon, like what you did here...it carries a unique and fresh flavor; last line is crossing me up though; can't see the meaning yet...but this is vibrant write, brother, no doubt; I'm a big fan of using the expression 'Super Nova' wherever and whenever possible, the pull quoted lines are creative, like the way it  sounds....stay well,Â
Thanks Christopher so the end line was supposed to correspond to the first line as me being a student of life and after death life which is our teacher no longer knows me, kind of cheesy but the thought was this could be the message upon my tombstone and i tried to make it short and that is quite difficult to reduce all my characteristics into four lines. Ill most likely will go back and mess with this. I also love supernova as well and i use it in reference to the passionate lover that iam and i have been a father through some of the best times in my life. Appreciate the comment i enjoy the way you break down the poem hope all is well with you.
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Very cool and stylistic poem, Devon, like what you did here...it carries a unique and fresh flavor; last line is crossing me up though; can't see the meaning yet...but this is vibrant write, brother, no doubt; I'm a big fan of using the expression 'Super Nova' wherever and whenever possible, the pull quoted lines are creative, like the way it  sounds....stay well,Â
'Star lover super nova
Father of good times'
Thanks Christopher so the end line was supposed to correspond to the first line as me being a student of life and after death life which is our teacher no longer knows me, kind of cheesy but the thought was this could be the message upon my tombstone and i tried to make it short and that is quite difficult to reduce all my characteristics into four lines. Ill most likely will go back and mess with this. I also love supernova as well and i use it in reference to the passionate lover that iam and i have been a father through some of the best times in my life. Appreciate the comment i enjoy the way you break down the poem hope all is well with you.