Winter Everlasting
Among my many regrets...
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There you stand...
With all of my shortcomings
And failings in hand...
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Division unplanned
And I don't understand...
Why present me with beautyĀ
Then reduce it to sand...
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I guess as they say it's the way that it goes...
I drop some degrees til I reach the belows...
Sadly you'll find me in the place where I froze...
Cold and alone with the future I chose...
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Sick of the madness and nobody knows...
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Of the festering darkness that steadily grows...
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In the sun in the rain in the dew of the rose...
No rhyme and no reason just a whole lot of prose...
Not a whole lot of pros just cons for the crows...
Battered and beaten just bottling blows...Ā
Primed to desist in a world so amiss...
I hardly could list the things that bring bliss...
Though while peering the void and casing the abyss...
I have found myself wanting but getting the gist...
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Without her my world is winter everlastingĀ
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Hello Curious...
You did it again...
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This is so beautiful and sad...
Give me a sec...
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I'm ok...
A little Mystery at the end...
Without herĀ my world is winter everlasting
That could be good or bad?
Umm...
Yup...
You got me...
Hint?
Great beautiful and sad write...
Thank you for sharing...
Best wishes and blessings my friend...
sparrowsong
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Aww Sparrow my love yes a tear for the melancholy of it and a tear for the beauty of the ART! I always love your comments! It could be bad but it could be good too. It may be cold but see how the snow casts a crystalline glow over everything. Those winters of life can make or break us. Alright that's enough favoritism for you no more hints! Lol thank you as always for your wonderful feedback.
CO
Ok ...
Got it!
Thank you so much!
š¤š On the Cheek...
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sparrowsong
Hello CO
IĀ really enjoyed this
This line really spoke to me, just the detail and the imagery is superb in the whole peiceĀ
We can all get lost even when we stay still
is the choice many of us take and somtimes this can be regrettableĀ
Really made me think
lorna xx
Hey Lorna! I love to hear that, I like to imagine the reader is seeing the image as vividly as I am. And how very true and a lesson to learn over every day. That we should live in such a way that denies regret its right of passage in our minds and hearts. Lovely feedback thank you!
CO
CO, a most glowing poem and enjoyed reading from beginning to end.
A poem of pensive sadness and soul searching but written more than well.
And to this contented reader after your last line:-
Without her my world is winter everlastingĀ
There is no full stop.
No final closure.
For it's eternal, perpetual, forever never ending.
Destined to drift in the ether.
It seems to add to what has gone before and emphasising your final word
everlasting
Nicely delivered on that front.
Thank you for sharing and full poetic honours respectfully bestowed.
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Shaun, my humblest gratitude I always love to hear exactly what caught your attention or stood out so I can remember to add that spice to my next piece so thank you for that! From one Poet to another write on brother.Ā
CO
CO, It is a pleasure to read your work and this so so poet thanks you again and will be stopping by your poetry neighbourhood again with good intentions.
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Hey ONLOOKER!!......your intent beautifully delivered.....it's not hard to relate to the honesty of this......but using that almost Edgar Allen Poe type of rhythmic repetition in the timing is brilliant....and certainly helps the reader to flow straight through!!......I pray you find some peace in your heart if this be true?!!.........well done my friend!!....ALL STARS!!.....LOVE &ROCKETS!!......T xo
Hey T!! I appreciate your feedback on this. I would say it's more of an extra dramatization of some temporary pain brother I do miss her a lot that's true but the pain haunts me no more. Everything has a time and a season, Everything has a rhyme and a reason brother, fly high š oh and I loved that you compared me to Poe he will forever be my idol. A giant in the world of the grim yet poetic!!Ā
CO