Poem -
You'll Wish
When you're all alone..
You'll wish you hadn't been so selfish.
When you're lost without me..
You'll wish you'dย found the time.
When your heart is aching..
You'll wish you'd taken better care of me.
When you're empty handed..
You'll wish you'd held tighter to mine.
When you're feeling broken,
Hoping to find the missing pieces..
You'll look back and see
You had it all before.
When you're tearing out your hair
To find a way to make it right,
You'll hate yourself..
And wish you would've loved me more
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Amen!!ย Sister Poet!!...... sometimes you just gotta school 'em............great sense of rhythm and timing here........ well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered.........ALL STARS!!.....LOVE and ROCKETS!!........T xoย ?โโดโณ
This is both a triumphant rallying cry...and a paean to lost love; the rhythm and clearly defined rhyme scheme shape the whole beautifully.
I love the above quoted lines...wonderful idea, perfectly thought out.
Great to see you posting new work, Molly. I hope you're well.
J ;)
So sad.
โกWolf
Lovely writingย
Thank you so much!! This poem is about a deep and fresh wound so it means so much to hear such lovely things from you all! My favorite part about writing poetry is creating something beautiful from tragedy, so it's great to hear from you!!
Thank you again, so much! <3
Hi Molly! ย Really enjoyed this piece, particularly:
"When you're feeling broken,
Hoping to find the missing pieces..
You'll look back and see
You had it all before."
The grass isn't always greener...
In reading your comment about fresh wounds and creating something beautiful from tragedy, I totally agree. ย Writing is therapeutic, and typically others can relate, whether the topic is light or more dark/deep.
Appreciate the vulnerability. ย Thanks for sharing!*!*!
Jacki
Thank you , Jacki! So glad you enjoyed it! And you're absolutely right about the grass! Someone once told me if you didn't earn it, you won't keep it. That always stuck with me. Thanks again for reading and for the kind words!
Wow. I love this so much.
Thank you!!! :)
Greetings Moly,
"Powerful words indeed" and all those, (whomย has spoken already), (through the conglomeration of poets/poetess above) and the many, down below to come, this piece was very ย well constructedย and at the same time of the write, a rediscovery of a (valued worth), she, (the character subject), ย hadย (without due intentions),ย allowed to be placed aside, for the feelings of another...Really felt the recovery in this piece and when your once, closely clenchedย handย to his, (opened), to allow him the space to realize, that not always, willย the road heย left out on,ย be there orย (open tooย the travel),ย when heย finds the time to wonna return....Sad how some rather learn from their own mistakes, instead of taking heed to others....Pride thing are just wonna take chances with what theyย have, (whether they face loosing it are not)???Sometimes the limit constitutes the end...Hope he gets it together soon, clearly it appears you still careย for him, (just not his actions).....Take Care?...Jim
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Thank you for your insight, Jim. I really appreciate your looking deeper into this piece. You hit the nail(s) on the head. Sometimes in life we just have to redirect the road so we can travel it alone! As difficult as it may be, it usually is the best, if not only, way it can be done. Hope to hear more from you soon. Thank you again!! <3ย
awesome ink worthy of a nomination
Thank you my dear!!!! So much.
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