Poem -
Young Love And Loss
Like ' Thanatopsis'
In its majesty and contrary brooks
A major contemplation
On death's predicament
Where fear begins
To tear you apart
And screams,
" You can't get wounded
If you've got no heart! "
From the tapering summits
Of divided minarets
Protecting the castles
Of Love and Death
I can't stand to see you
This way
But,
When two souls stand up
Erect and two-strong
The lotic movement of love's
Babbling brooks
Takes into account
Young wantonness
And the rapture felt
While deep in
The ' cherry ripe '
Springtime,
Of,
Love and loss....
Tony Taylor
* another work in progress
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??? bravo my friend an excellent piece of work in progress, very intriguing indeed...
"Where fear begins
To tear you apart
And screams,
" You can't get wounded
If you've got no heart! "
what a brilliant part this is surrounded by your elegant writing skills! ??โฎ? brother!ย
Hey Thanx WAYNE!!.....I think, when I'm finished with this, it will be one of the best poems I've written thus far......I appreciate your kind support my friend!!.....TTYL!!......T xo ??
Your usual visionary flair delves deeply into the central factors underlying reasons for showcasing attitudes to the topic. Bountiful reflections on relationship motivators and inhibitors.
Powerful synopsis indicating investigative yearnings of emotional responses to driving forces of life.
Competent manifestation of intuitive complexities regarding evaluations of emotional negotiation or conflagration.
Take care my friend, on your journey to seek valuable insight.ย
Warmest wishes.ย ย :)
SIR WATERS!!.....I don't know how you do it...... your comments are striking pieces of insight that sound like the kind of words one would receive from a professor of English Lit./ poetry......I can't tell you how inspiring it is to receive them......I thank you for the motivating attention to detail my friend......... I am more than grateful for ALL you do!!...... your friend and admirer.......T xo ???
Iโll cut to the chaseย
this is a hot mamma of a poem
ย ย publish pleaseย
โโโโโโ ย Fabulous words &
play ofย
ย ย Somewhere betweenย
ย Romeo &ย
ย ย Julietย
ย ย Excellent!!
ย ย Luv from Jai:))ย
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Thanks for this JAI MASTERS!!...... " somewhere between Romeo and Juliet.."..... wow!!....... your words are VERY much appreciated my friend!!.......I may just have to publish!!....... smiles!!...... stay groovy!!.......T xo ???
How do you do it ?!!!.....yet another gem of a work my friend!...I keep rereading it and finding lovely new elements that just thrill the reader and takes them on a wonderful journey. I love how your imagination takes you to another place entirely, and with your words you lead us to that place also Pinned to read again and again ..Thank you for this Tony..beautiful!
Lodigiana x
Wow!!..... just the idea that you would read it over again is MORE than inspiring dear poet sister!!...... I do so look forward to your opinions and commentary!!...... you, along with several others, are such an inspiration to me......I thank you for ALL you do for ALL you do!!......I AM particularly proud of this write and believe that when it's finished it will be one of my best poems!!......thanx again for being groovy LO!!...... smiles.......T xo ???? โค ?
Old Billy Boy Bryant ain't got nothin' on you, Tony, heh-heh.
Not only does this poem convey a good romantic tale, it is also chock-full of wonderfully alliterative phrases and rich metaphor.
Bravo, Sir "T".
~Dean โ
Hey DEAN!!.....I was wondering if someone was going to mention the classic poem by W.C.Bryant....that poem 'blows doors' over mine..... but I am so pleased that you mentioned it.......I know they don't belong in the same league but it's so cool to mentioned alongside him!!.....I DO believe that when this write is in its final form it will be one of my better writes!!...... good lookin' out brother poet!!...... you're too cool!!.......thanx for this!!....... peace......T xo ???โค ?
I greatly enjoying this poem, Tony. Instantly I derived from it a Shakespearean element that I havenโt found much of around here so this poem is not only beautifully composed and hence eloquent it is also unique which is one of the things I love poetry for because it allows the individual to really shine through his/her work. Thank you for sharing this with all of us!ย
Tehmina xo
Thank You TEHMINA!!.....I don't think I should mentioned in the same breath as W'S. (smiles).... but I'm glad you found something special in this write...... very much appreciate your reading this my friend...... love to you and yours!!......T xo ?
yo line
" You can't get wounded
If you've got no heart! "
i enjoy it
Thanx APRIL!!.....I really like that quote too!!......a pleasure dear poet sister!!...... smiles.....T xo ?โค
My Dear Brother Poet Tony,
Take my hand and fear no more
Your aching body will I restore
Our love will conquer all impedes
Our singing Souls suffice all needs
Love you Bro,
Larry xxx