Poem - 15 August 2018, 16:24

Aquaplane

Full of momentum
Intoxicated on summer's sunshine
No respect for the rain
I need to stop suddenly
Can't do it gently
Slam on the breaks
And drift eloquently
In slow motion...
I aquaplane

Danger in beauty
Beauty in wisdom
Bones fracture brilliantly
Like light in prisms
No room for logic
Slow motion gliding
Common sense hiding...
Cataclysm

Palace of wisdom?
If I live, leave me bleeding
Sucking moist air
With blood, hair and glass
Wrapped around my face
Whiplash with no headrest
Leave me crippled
And crumpled...

Another rusted ruin
At the side of the road to excess...

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Speculative Tragedy

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Nine Eleven15 August 2018, 22:13

I love the description,

Bones fracture brilliantly

Pinned it, great write Syd.

Syd16 August 2018, 01:31

Thank you so much for Gerrard. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and I appreciate the pin.

Take care - Syd

Larry Ran19 August 2018, 02:55

Dear Syd,

Aquaman is flying
Through the clouds of pouring rain
He swears at thunder's warning
Treats the lightning with disdain
.
One day his plane will crumble
And come crashing to the ground
But he begs you not to save him
For in death, such peace will he have found!

Love,
Larry xxx

Syd19 August 2018, 03:54

Hi Larry, your words are always very good but this time they are exceptional.
Thank you.

Peace and love also xxx

Charu Shaawd19 August 2018, 06:01

Syd

What a write ?
excess of anything is never good.

love the momentum that kept building up till d end. Tragic are accidents undoubtedly but a learning lesson to never cross those bounds. Your poem speaks so thickly about how difficult restitution is when tragedies occur.
Thats why someone quotes “prevention is better than cure”

liked it very much

Syd20 August 2018, 07:37

Hi Charu, apologies for my late reply. I'm glad you like my poem. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I agree that excess of anything is never good and that "prevention is better than a cure"

Unfortunately, I struggle with my drinking among other things, but hopefully soon I'll improve.

Take care - Syd xo

Charu Shaawd21 August 2018, 09:27

Will keep u in my prayers xx

S.zaynab.kamoonpury21 August 2018, 09:21

....................... Wow amazing word choice and interesting muse here. I like how this is fast paced and sequenced swell. Poetic throughout and intense ending. Kudos.

soo nice to read from your pen again.

Syd22 August 2018, 08:21

So nice to hear from you again S. I'm really glad enjoyed this piece. I'll head over to your page for a read now.

- Syd