Poem -
Bilge
Bilge
Although she paints him darkly
and through those dull shaded lenses of hers
flimsy she might sail ..
Yet in her wake, I thought I heard
sad shanty songs ..
From the missing crew of a stricken craft
perhaps, now filled
with the discarded ghosts of long lost poets ..
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cool write Linda
Cool .................... thanks Linda :)
Ooh I love the eerie feel this has Neville, I pictured a heavy mist on the ocean with an old ship. You know the old tall ships with the women on the front? It was symbolic in my head, of a woman who had collected more than her share of poetic male souls in her lifetime.
just my take...enjoyed the creepy feel it gave me. She sounds creepy 🙃 x
Sounds good, feels even better ..................... is that even possible he thought just before hitting the send button ...................... x
I didn't tell anyone I was going on a cruise 🛳, this poem definitely had me longing for the shores with it's eerie vibes , strong visuals here... great poem N.
Cheers Rob .. unfortunately my cruise was cancelled in September .. because South Africa was on the UK red list ...................................
this particular little scribble would read better .. and maybe look better if centered on the page which Cosmo does not presently permit .... N
WoW!! NEVILLE!!....ok I agree with much of the above.....especially the feel that is created by your words....but....doesn't BILGE have to do with the design of a craft......like the flat part that occurs just after the curve?....Maybe I'm just reaching here....but it's the weak part of the ship that is most likely to take on water and possibly be responsible for the demise of the crew in this poem......and may be the reason for the "Sad shanty songs..".......hey, I said I was reaching here!.....regardless of my flimsy interpretation, this is a VERY compelling write/read my friend!!......ALL STARS!! & PINNED!!......Bravo!!.........BEAUTIFULLY penned dear poet brother!!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!..,....T xo : )
You appear to have done your research Tony .. the term bilge is used variously over here in the UK .. for example, on a vessel you are almost spot on, there is the bilge line and bilge pump .. just for the record, my father was a traditional boat builder .. the term is also applied every now and then in a derogatory fashion when it might be said someone is talking a load of bilge .. I am tho' happy with anyone's interpretation & am glad you found your way here .............................. L & R back at ya squire ...................................... N :)