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Bleeding heart...

Bleeding heart...

Please take what is within me and cradle it like you mean it
My bones heal when I fall, but I beat everyday just feel it
Are you willing to catch the drips when I weep for your hunger
I fumble around the rose petals just to smell the love that lingers

Will you hold my bleeding heart
Lost love is my lasting call
All I feel is liquid in my palm
Please take my bleeding heart...

Day after day, you will breathe the same scent from my hair
As the clock ticks, roses will turn black and you'll be in despair
Are you willing to whisper words in my ear to give me goosebumps
Will you brush your tongue across my lips, giving me a sensual rush

Will you hold my bleeding heart
Lost love is my lasting call
All I feel is liquid in my palm
Please take my bleeding heart...

I will accept your floating caress and I will feel submissively blessed
I will succumb, and my beat will become angelically dressed
My fatal romance with your soul will give me a glimpse of life
My weeping heart will become one, and it will start to run dry

Are you willing to hold me after what I've said?
The days are running thin, after all that I've bled
Let me grasp your hand, and put it against my beating chest
I will cherish you, I will love you, until no more days are left

Will you hold my bleeding heart
Lost love is my lasting call
All I feel is liquid in my palm
Please take my bleeding heart...
Drip, Drip, Drip...

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Gerard McGowan

I actually want to hold your bleeding heart and take a piece of that inspiration, maybe then I could write poetry as good as you.ย 

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Wayne Stubbs

๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ my word Gerard what an amazing thing to say, thank you ever so much, I'm humbled from the words you speak! You're a very talented poet too, we all are on this gifted site! we all gave our strengths in different forms, I really appreciate your lovely comment ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜Š

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Dean Kuch

Good rhyme scheme featuring an aabb rhyme scheme and some inventive slant or near rhyming.
The poem reads smoothly enough when read aloud.
I'm of the mind that when poetry is being reviewed it should always be read out loud. You get the full impact of what the poet is trying to say and the way in which he or she is attempting to say it. There's some good internal rhyme going on in the following stanza as well:

I will accept your floating caress and feel submissively blessed;
I will succumb, my beat becomes audible, angelically dressed.
This fatal romance will give us a chance at life, if we just but try.
Our weeping hearts will become as one, and soon start to run dry

A most excellent read, Wayne.
~Dean

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Wayne Stubbs

Thanks very much Dean for your honest comment, I take every comment with a sense of improving myself ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ‘

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Dean Kuch

It's always a pleasure, Wayne.
Like you, I take each and every comment to heart.
We have to in order to improve, yes?
~Dean

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Tina

Wow...some soul searching here! ย It's a very lovely poem, Wayne.

"I fumble around the rose petals just to smell the love that lingers "

I love this line ... it says so much. This line just jumped right out when I read it.ย 

I do hope your heart heals ...I know the pain.

A really lovely poem, Wayne ๐ŸŒน

Tina x

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Wayne Stubbs

Thanks so much Tina, you know when you write something and your normal self asks your creative self, where did that come from? Well I had that kind of moment with this write, sometimes my mind goes from one thing to another so quick and my writes the same, but this one will linger like the scent of roses somehow...ย 
thanks ever so much for your support Tina ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ’“

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Tina

"Your normal self asks your creative self, where did that come from?"

I know exactly what you mean! It happens like that, doesn't it? ๐Ÿ˜‚ ย x

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Wayne Stubbs

Always haha, my normal self is a backseat driver most times ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ but when the sat nav talks to me that's when all hell breaks loose!! ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ’“

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Cherie Sumner

Hi Wayne.....I love the imagery of the bleeding heart in the palms....making the point very prominent....Great formatting for this poem...You did a great job with the flow and the theme too..I like the pleading nature throughout this poem...making love a physical pouring out.....Very cool.ย  xo ;)

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Wayne Stubbs

Wow! Thanks a lot Cherie, I thought you would have liked this theme, when I finished I thought to myself, Cherie will like this haha,
thanks again poet sister! ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ’“

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