Can you see me

Interesting metaphors. I also enjoyed the tone. Great sense of rhyme. It reads abstract to me in many ways. I read it twice to fully grasp the meaning. 

Favorite Lines: 

Painfully my Patience turns into the patterns of the day...as moments kills every moment like a dry cry.

I like how you mention patients and patterns, that is like writing a poem for the first time, when the emotion is fresh, the words just flow out. We use our literary brain to edit, but the best poems I've read come from a much deeper place. I felt a longing in the poem, for inspiration, for change and for more excitement in your life. That's how I read it. Good job.

I'm taking a journey today, I'll try to read as many of your poems as I can. 
 

Sir LORRIS!!....what an engaging and truly poetic piece of prose you've offered up here........I LOVE the way you formatted this... essentially separated your ideas with it!!...... fun stuff dear poet brother!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo.  : )

Lorris,  Really nice write. Love, Terry Kay