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CLOTH TRIMMED BOX (get your hanky ready)

CLOTH TRIMMED BOX (get your hanky ready)

A bright flash
blinds his eyes
the sound of the horn
takes him by surprise
his bike starts to wobble 
CRASH!
Over he topples 

The screech of brakes
fill the air 
People turn and stare 
the boy lies lifeless 
He has no air 
Blood on his face 
And mattered hair 

Skin opaque 
Null of colour 
Life extinguished 
Pulse relinquished 
Body contorted 
Eye’s distorted 
His life thwarted

In a little wooden box 
lies her greatest treasure 
A priceless gem 
worth can't be measured 

In a little wooden box 
There's a pair of shoes 
A special gift 
he wore for school 

She wants to run to it 
she wants to look inside 
But she can only sit 
and stare wide eyed 
with tears streaming 
they sting her eyes  

There's someone talking 
she can't hear 
her body numb 
she feels quite queer

There's music playing 
soft somewhere 
as to where 
she is unaware 
her mind his locked 
eyes fixated 
on that little wooden box 

In a little wooden box 
There's a pair of glasses 
They're custom made 
In the latest fashion 
D&G runs down the side 
Behind the lenses 
Closed eyes lie 

In a little wooden box 
Is a little silk red tie 
she made it herself 
for her special guy 

Her husband helps her  
onto shaky feet  
Trying to stand
is quite a feat 
But slowly she rises 
And moves her feet 

He holds her tight
close to his chest 
with how she wobbles
it's probably for the best 
as they take a slow walk
towards that little wooden chest

Her heart starts to beat 
She starts to perspire 
Inside her chest 
Her lungs feel as though 
They are on fire 
But still she continues
on with her walk
even though 
she is breathless 
and cannot talk  

They reach the end 
then stare into the box 
Made from fine oak 
and trimmed in fine cloth
Brass handles hang of the side 
A picture of Thomas 
Lies by his side 
The vision presented 
brings more tears to her eyes
she can’t hold them back 
and tears stream
from her eyes  

Just ten years old 
in his young prime
dressed to the nines 
pin striped suit 
silk red tie

Riding home
knocked of his bike
no lights 
6 pm Saturday night 
Took the back roads 
in the midst of the night

In that little wooden box 
she brushes down his suit 
takes her sleeve 
And cleans his shoes
straightens his glasses 
his silk tie too
kisses his head 
like she did before 
but this time she wont 
be closing no bedroom door

In that little wooden box 
lies her greatest treasure 
A priceless gem 
worth can't be measured

The door opens
everybody turns 
a man stands in the doorway 
angry faces stare back 
He takes a seat right at the back 
with a bunch of flowers 
sat on his lap

He puts his head into his hands 
But he is not napping 
his eyes wield his guilt
he’s the reason 
this little boy 
lies dead in his
pin striped  suit

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Georgina Richardson

Hi Jeff,

This piece is so heart wrenching and so sad. I certainly know the pain of loss as I lost my eldest son to cancer in 2009 aged 31, so I know how hard it is to live without the most precious thing in life, that of one of our children. Parents aren`t supposed to out-live their children are they?! it just doesn`t make sense and that pain never goes away. You have written this piece so beautifully and your readers can feel the pain through your beautiful words. Well done honey you are very talented.

God bless

G xx

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J A Overton

Wow Georgina, i wasn't expecting that sort of a response but i'll gladly take it.

thanks so much for taking the time to read and humbly express my gratitude for also commenting. 

thank you 

Jeff

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J A Overton

Hi Georgina. I read the comments or should i say quickly scanned as i was at work. I have just re read them and feel so ashamed that i did say sorry for your loss, for this im truly sorry.

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Rose Sho

Hi Jeff, this is very sad indeed. Losing a son that way is heartbreaking. You got me crying. I enjoyed the flow of words though. Nice one Jeff.

Lots of love...Rose

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J A Overton

Ah rose told you to that hanky ready. thanks for reading and commenting 

Cheers jeff

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Tony Taylor

This is AMAZING JEFF!!...... glad you pointed me here...... the images from stanza to stanza are absolutely breathtaking and delivered with such poetic grace that you can't help get teary eyed...... the ending is profoundly moving.......I felt as though I had just seen a short film it was SO engrossing...... excellent word choices and incredible phrasing...... you are gifted writer my friend........ wow!!......ALL STARS.......smokin' grooves bro!!....smokin' ass grooves!!.......LOVE and ROCKETS!!........T xo

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J A Overton

WOW!!!! now that's how you write a review lol thanks so much Tony for you kind words

cheers jeff

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sparrowsong

Hello Jeff...

Memories flashed back to some of my own very close calls...

One flashed even brighter...

The day I watched my little girl almost get run over by a woman driving an ice cream truck...

My daughter had her ice cream in her hand and she hadn't had a chance to open it yet...

The driver was so rude and it was her fault...

This was the first time I actually saw people yell at the driver...

The driver was even rude to them...

They told the driver not to come back...

She came back three days in a row...

No one on our side of the block felt safe buying an ice cream from her...

They said next time she will run over one of our kids on purpose...

She never came back to our neighborhood after that...

Too many children lay in those cloth trimmed boxes...

Very sad!

Great write !

Thank you for sharing...

Hugs...

sparrowsong 

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J A Overton

there are some vile people in this world, with vile foul mouths i'm glad your not one of them and say the nicest words on your reviews 

thanks Jeff

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Christopher Correia

Jeff, this is a very powerful piece of writing here my friend, had to tell myself that it's just a poem, a  difficult story to look at from the outside, very sad but beautifully framed... your story telling is oh so compelling, made this tale come off very real, not sure what inspired this one but I felt it....your style reminds me a bit of Robert Service... precision in construction, touching the right places.... this is very good, and highly emotional... thanks for the heads up, cheers

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J A Overton

Hi my friend

                     I was sat one day at work and a lad on a scooter was narrowly missed by a car he wobbled firva while and i thought he was going to come off. But i didnt think that would make a compelling poem so after a bit of word play. I came up with this. I wanted the poem to have that much of an impact that it either made the reader cry or at least draw a lump in the throat.I try and write with realism to make the biggest impact i can just like i did with 

Let them call here home. But i do write nice ones like the boy of seven about a boy who is awake on christmas eve and sees santa.

Thanks for reading my friend and the compelling review

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Christopher Correia

lol, very cool explanation... and I think you're right about 'making an impact', so true, anyway it turned out great, whatever the inspiration....cheers  

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J A Overton

Hi kimmy thanks for taking the time to read and comment 

Cheers jeff

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