Poem -
Countdown
It was easy to say
When there was a good chance of being saved .
It is not hard to be brave .
When its a big ship and not under the waves .
However as time ticked by .
The bravado long ago ran dry
As the situation became more dire
Greedy sea water reaching higher .
He jumped into the water
- cursing he wasn't a woman or child ...
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Comments
I really like this Chris....the last line changes the whole verse...cracking write ?
Thank you Marion ! I'm glad you enjoyed and hope you have had a good Saturday :)
I loved the end of the poem! The rhyme scheme is well done.
I found the last two lines a bit humorous, although I'm not sure if it was meant as humor, but it left me smiling nonetheless. So happy I found your poem today, it has inspired me to try writing something short. Thank you!
Good evening Katina and thank you for your feedback , Its always nice to read opinions of your own work !! If you have read any more of my work I suppose I only tend to write short poetry , I envy you in being able to write long poems , If I attempt too , I find I lose my thread ! Wishing you a happy day and keep writing ! x
I read the poem again and it still made me smile at the end, however maybe I shouldn't be smiling as the guy had to jump into the water, ha-ha! Oh, how I enjoy stumbling upon something unique and clever as this!