Dawn And Far From Me
Days turned into years for me and my absinthe heart
Years turned into centuries for her and her Magdalene eyes
For a night I calmed her cries
But, the angry years of her brought the flood
That washed and swept away all hope
Hope for chance
Dying was my sight of love
Rain was acid from above
Angered angels that loved her, punished..
loathed my treatment of one of their own
I cowered
And accepted the demise
Of our once heavenly love
Pouring from above...
was finally light
I knelt before her and looked longingly into her eyes...those Magdalene eyes
Said my sorry and let her be
And now she is free
As dawn begins to shine on her
And I go...
and she will be free, emancipated
Far from me
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Very well written and the way I receive this is feelings of regret and wrong doing? No one is free from sin and we all have regrets and mistakes that are made. If I am right in my interpretation, I must say it is very well written and created imagery in my mind so easily.
Thank you sir. Yes it is about regret and wanting to right wrongs. There comes a time when enough is enough. I didn't hurt her physically. It was neglecting and not spending quality time with her which she really wanted. But still, that's just as bad, really. When you see and hear her cry, finally your conscience will get to you. Thanks again for your feedback, my friend.
Thank you all for voting and liking this piece. Yes it was painful to write but it set free an angel of a woman and gave me peace.
Interesting poem.
I am now intrigued with your writing style. The metaphors are fantastic in the poem.
Favorite lines:
Dying was my sight of love
Rain was acid from above
Thank you for sharing the poem.
Oh thank you. Yes, I do use metaphors in most of my poems. Metaphors tend to soften whatever pain you are going through. Be creative, be real and you will be alive. ❤️