Poem -

Do not criticise

Do not sit in judgement
you don’t know what I’ve seen
do not make your mind up
until you’ve been where I have been

life is not been easy
at times it’s been very rough
you cannot begin to imagine
how I suffered, life’s been tough

Not everyone is lucky
A rose garden it is not
there was no perfect childhood
schooling I never got 

it easy to be smug
and criticise what I’ve done
you sit there in your ivory tower
life for you is a bundle of fun

You never stop and listen
or give me the time of day
you walk past very quickly
go rapidly on your way

I am society’s problem
That they brush over to one side
don’t bother to try and deal with me
it’s easier if I hide

When I die no one will mourn
I won’t ever be missed
no father to look up to
no mother to tenderly kiss

Next time you see me about
try taking the time of day
just a smile or nod
say hello, go out your way

You might just be surprised
you will never know
you might find I’m quite nice
go on try, give it a go

Just don’t sit in judgement
don’t look down on me
be grateful you’re not in my shoe
it’s easy, try and see.

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Gerard McGowan

Hello Mandy, good to hear from you, keep your chin up, love and light to you. Welcome to cosmo. 

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Mandy Hoy

Thank you, it an amazing place, so much talent and beauty. Glad to have found you all.

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Tina

A heartfelt write poetically expressed 😊 you are right, of course, no need to judge. Welcome to Cosmo, Mandy 😊

Tina x

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Mandy Hoy

Many thanks for your comment. After years in social work, the way we treat mental health and misfortune saddens me. Nice to meet others so compassionate.

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Alessandra Scarlet

I love this poem. Most people write something like this in third person but the hardest way to write it is in first person. You did very well, wonderful writing. 

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It flowed marvelously , despite the struggles and discomfort of your own reality , you've managed to capture the heart of the reader with your honest words.

I love how this was written, in my opinion this should be posted everywhere, in public places , schools etc.

It packs one hell of a punch , it's powerful.

Excellent poetic form Mandy 👏👏👏👏👏👏☕

 

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J

A great reminder of our need for compassion, truly inspiring, thanks for sharing.

J

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Cappblanks

Judgement is critical to philosophy, hypothesis, vetting, science and all things progressive. Would you also request these things not to be examined in order to obtain a mundane impunity? 

Your writing is in such scrutinized detail. Hypocrite much?

The statement is accurate to concise meaning. Take it as you will.
 

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Mandy Hoy

Wow! I won't pretend to understand what you have just said, but I don't see how judging/criticising and ignoring someone who has mental health problems, would benefit philosophy or science. I take the time to sit and talk and help these people , as a job and voluntarily and you would be surprised what a smile or a good morning means. An acknowledgement of their existence and support for them cannot be detrimental to society only beneficial. 

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Cappblanks

How do you claim to listen and the go straight to being ignorant? You dont understand what I say? But claim to be an empath? 

I took the time to read what you said and came to my conclusion. Why do you not show the same leniency?

Is telling someone who speaks clear and concise english you don't understand them helpful to their mental health? 

I don't work in the area but am happy to clarify my statement in a more common vernacular, if you like?

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Cappblanks

And your title " do not criticize " you blantely stated you have no clue what I'm talking about. That's the definition of ignorant, like I stated I'm ignorant I  the area of mental health. 

I did not try to attack anyone and do not understand mental health on a formal text book level. I would accuse you of doing what you tell others not to.  

you ignore my statement as you are ignorant to its meaning? correct?

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Mandy Hoy

I do not pretend to be well educated and that's why I didn't understand your first statement, it went over my head, so you are correct I am ignorant to it's meaning. 
Enlightened me

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Cappblanks

Impunity: a person or persons who are not affected by the law or punishable in the court of law or by a group of peers.

scrutinize: an observation. Different word same or similar meaning. A synonym for scrutinize is vet. To proceed vetting: begin observation.

Hypocrite: hold ones believes above another. Me: perhaps I was a hypocrite in my statement. Edit: Bigot holds the value I gave to hypocrite. Bigot was the word I meant to use. Apologies.

I was simply stating that with out passing judgement, judgement cannot be made. I was not criticizing I was making a judgement on how I interpreted you poem. To hide from judgement is to be blind to fact. In my opinion. 

I am not very educated either and have also had the same issues as yourself, in the past. A lot I have learned recently.

 

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Cappblanks

So it's a poem related to others as opposed to yourself? Correct? That's making judgement. Are you aware of this?

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Mandy Hoy

I was making an observation, having been homeless and suffering mental illness in the past. 

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Cappblanks

I have lots of time for you, if you have time for me.

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