"Doubt, regret and sorrow/ the beast within"Β By Ben Goode 2013
You think you have escaped?
Go take another step and die!
You failed fool, and never tried!
Take the blade, give me blood.
Dive in deep, into a flood.
Let the waves, take you I say.
Write your gloom, and go away!
You're not so good, you just pretend.
Maybe it, should all just end!
Lie down with sin, and take the pleasure.
Lie again, it is my leisure.
It is in your darkness I hide, your sin.Β
You're skating on the ice, that's thin.Β
Got ahead, and laugh away.
You'll cry again, another day.
I'm in the shadows, of your own mind.Β
Place of regret, and not-so-kind.Β
I am here waiting, and yes it's true.Β
There's not a damned thing, you can do!
I have seen your tears, that fall.Β
I sit with you, and want more!Β
Call upon me. Set me free.Β
The Fury, disappointed, me!.Β
I grin. I snarl as the beast within.Β
For I am here, you cannot win!
Anger, vengeance, of searing scorn,Β
You'll rue the day, you were ever born.
Comments
A superbly etched masterpiece. A grand pleasure to read
You really think so? I wrote it some time ago now. I didnβt rewrite or edit it. I do that a lot lately though. But it seems to change the original intention and character of it. Iβm not always happy with my writing. And I leave a lot of it out. I probably should include it. Itβs experimenting. My writing style has changed exponentially. And feelings are not as easy to express anymore. Maybe cause so many of them are suppressed...
yes, to be honest, I read quite a bit of poetry and I will not comment if it isn't any good. All poets second guess themselves. it's just human nature.
I think I have a lot of earlier work on here that was never really acknowledged. So Iβm thinking it might all need a reboot or deletion.
to get more acknowledgment for your work, keep commenting on others work. I have haunted cosmo halls for several years and still don't get many commenters, me thinks it's because I don't stray from rhyme.Β
Yeah I have been quite lazy that way. At one stage earlier on, I had even considered shutting down my whole account. I used to have a poetry group on Facebook too, but it got taken over by trolls. I managed to shut that down, But not before a lot of my work was stolen. And very heavily criticised. Then I was introduced to this site and I have continued on. Barely but, still here. Itβs only you and a few others who have kept me here though.Β
keep plucking at the writing, you are very talented. there will always be some mean people, but on cosmo the majority are very nice.
Yes I agree with that. There is nobody mean on here thankfully π