Poem -
Drifting.....
Drifting in and out of dreams
Like I am in some place else
My vision is blurred
As my conscious mind
Recovers
But my subconscious mind
Continues
Lying in state
As I fall into that place
That some place else
Only my mind can reach
And switch off
For me to sleep
And I stop drifting in and out
I stay in one place
And remember
Vividly
What I have seen
Seemed so real
My mind is rested
I start a new
Catching my thoughts
My dream
Whilst drifting in and out
of sleepΒ
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Comments
what great poem every one
has that place we go when
things dont go well and want get
from it i love that world itΒ
gives me peace of mind
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Hi Greg. I know best place dreams are. Thanks for stars and that it was good enough for a pin ?
Wow the imagery is outstandingly superb. YouΒ
Thank you very much and for theΒ stars and pin. Wanted a fiction fantasy pic x
Fantastic read my friend, the verse, the image, beautiful.
Thank you Simon. Took time to find an image I liked! Glad you liked and for stars x
Well written, Prathiba x
Thank you ? and for the stars!! ?
Pratibha,Β This is an amazing poem vivid and full of vividness and colour. You paint a picture for the readers. Glorious and everlasting. Pure magic. Well done!Β Pinned and starred x
Thank you saf for star and pin. I enjoyed writing this one. Came quite easily to me since my nights with a baby is like that!! ?
What a beautifully penned poem. I really liked the format of the short lines and metaphors. Good work. I love the image also.Β
Favorite lines
Thank you Katrina for stars and lovely comment. It's how I write short lines wherever I can use them! Omg took me a little while to find what I wanted re fantasy pic. ?
VERY well crafted poetic prose PRATIBHA!!β¦...I gorgeous read & write!!β¦...ALL STARS!!β¦...enjoyed this!!β¦...LOVE & ROCKETS!!β¦..T xoΒ : )
Thank you Tony for the stars and lovely comment ?
Great work.
Thank you kindly Anthony ?
My Dear Pratibha,
A powerful poem illustrating how our subconscious controls us.
Peace and love,
Larry xxx
Thank you kindly Larry and for stars.Β
Glad you liked it ?
You must be dreaming of paradise Β if you were seeing beautiful imagery. You wrote a lovely dreamy and daydreams poem. Kudos for how you expressed.
plz Pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
Thank you for the lovely comment. Its what I was experiencing so decided to write it! The image had to be magical :)
Look fwd to reading yours x
Pratty,Β
I had to check out your poetry because you were so kind to comment on mine, and you write gorgeously! I love dreams, and I loved the flowing beauty of your devotion to them! Awesome write. Now I will have to check out more.Β
I did notice that you just started, and got more views, and likes, than I've gotten on all my poems combined, but that's OK, people know great writing. lol. Very nice!Β
Matthew.Β
Hi Matthew it's just Pratibha or P for short.Β
Thank you for the lovely comments. Glad you liked it. You just never know who will like it. I wrote what was on mind around dreams.
Yea only joined recently and I have just been enjoying reading other peoples writing, adding comments. Its so fascinating. The more people read your writing you will also receive more likes. So keep going! People will always comment on good writing like u said.
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What a beautiful narrative Pratibha..
We all can relate to those moments of visiting others worlds in sleep..
Makes me think that this time and place is not all.. and definitely not the end.
lovely write. Hope you are well. Be blessed my friend.
Thank you Wilford for liking my piece and lovely comments. Most appreciative. I'm good and our subconscious is an amazing piece of technology ?
You are such a shining star ..how have I missed so much?? ?
Hi Marion. Thank you ?
What have you missed??!!
I know the place you describe, I visit it often, thoroughly enjoyed lovely lady ?
? bliss x
yes i remmberΒ
this poemΒ
so glad itΒ
going to be read onΒ
the radioΒ
Thanks Greg yes! And it was! When I re readΒ I still love that dream place. Sending u a private message....px