Elemental
For my husband. Thank you for 20 years of soul sharing.
You taste of the sea and windswept spaces
As you capture my sigh within your hands
Your eyes tell stories of hidden places
I burrow down in the warmth of your land
As you capture my sigh within your hands
We're cradled in the glow of a moonbeam
I burrow down in the warmth of your land
And when we sleep it's your visions I dream
We're cradled in the glow of a moonbeam
Finding solace in a whale's lullaby
And when we sleep it's your visions I dream
Of children and horses learning to fly
Finding solace in a whale's lullaby
Your eyes tell stories of hidden places
Of horses and children learning to fly
You taste of the sea and windswept spaces
This is a pantoum style poem, with repeating lines that create a cascading effect.
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Comments
aww this is beautiful jenny and really soothing to read ,your husband i'm sure loves all your poetry and art ,but i'd say this is his fav .really deep feelings tina x
Thank you Tina, for taking time to read this!
Beautfiul sentiment Jenny! I too have been with my husband 20 years and I know exactly what you mean, lovely write :)
Thank you Rachel, and a huge congrats to you and your husband! Twenty years is quite an accomplishment!
Cheers Jenny, you too lol! :)
beautiful x
Thank you Susan! My guy is yummy and inspires imagery like this.
This is lovely…I know that you hubby is a well loved man and a very contented one!
val
Thanks so much Val! I really appreciate your comments and respect you as a writer(i'm sorry I'm lousy at leaving comments), your work is lovely!
Thanks again for reading Elemental,
Jenny
Jenny Good,
This is an earlier write from this gifted poetess. As the author states, this is being scribbled in a pantoum style, with repeating lines that create a cascading effect. Moreover, I strongly feel the imaginary could be made further crystal clear with inner meanings and more symbolic representations. I love the below lines:
" We're cradled in the glow of a moonbeam
Finding solace in a whale's lullaby
And when we sleep it's your visions I dream
Of children and horses learning to fly "
Reading between the lines: Symbols play a vital part in poetry writing. If you dream of seeing or riding a white horse, the indications are favorable for prosperity and pleasurable commingling with congenial friends and fair women. If the white horse is soiled and lean, your confidence will be betrayed by a jealous friend or a woman. If the horse is black, you will be successful in your fortune, but you will practice deception, and will be guilty of assignations.
Regards
WILLIAMSJI MAVELI